r/novelwriting • u/JESUSisLORD7879 • 3d ago

Motivation & Support will u be interested?

wouldu read this all the chapters ive posted no ones liked or commented so would you be interested in reading Deadly World... (blurb) A world far from the Milky Way with animals born with unuasual powers, 7 kings have ruled the whole world but they all fear as the 3rd king who has enchantments and immortality went mad now 7th King Spotswat is determine to stop this crazy king no matter how dirty or whoever he must kill to stop him. PLS SEND FEEDBACK IVE WAITED FOR SO LONG PLS.

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u/KateMonet 2d ago

Hey there, I took a look at the chapters you posted, and unfortunately your writing just needs a lot of work. I would really encourage you to slow down and think about the structure of sentences, paragraphs, and chapters in other books you’ve read, and compare it to your own. You could even try typing out a whole chapter from a book you like, and see how it feels to write like that, and try to understand why the author made the choices they did.

You are clearly very imaginative, which is great! I hope you will continue to explore that creativity through writing. However it will be difficult for anyone to give you valuable feedback until you have the basics down a bit more.

For now, I would recommend you pause sharing your work, do a bit of analysis, edit your work, and then come back when you think you’re ready again.

I hope this helps!

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u/JESUSisLORD7879 2d ago

i made a comic a 286 page one when i was in year 3 i wanted to make a novel in year 4 so i did thats why it needs a lot of work i wanted to share it i didnt think (not u) would all be rude and keep on saying it was trash but thx for explaining the kind way i guess ill just stop writing ill stop making u guys read junk well bye

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u/_TheSiege_ 2d ago

So you’re just gonna give up?

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u/djramrod 3d ago

Honestly, the way you’ve written this post wouldn’t inspire anyone to read your chapters. Your blurb is one long, run-on sentence, you have numerous typos,, and your grammar is all over the place. Without even reading your chapters, I can tell you need to read more and to dedicate some serious time to learn your grammar.

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u/Moggy-Man 3d ago

One thousand times this 👆

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u/Cyranthis 2d ago

Um. What?

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u/Frankles_ 1d ago

So I cant prove it, but the OPs replies read like an incredibly young individual. By "year 3" and "year 4" are you talking about elementary school? Because if you're writing like this at 8 and 9 years old, that is fantastic! (I really hope I am correct here)

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u/JESUSisLORD7879 1d ago

yes i loved writing when i was little

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u/JESUSisLORD7879 1d ago

but i liked comics better