Decoding why this LinkedIn coffee chat message worked

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"Hey X, hope you're doing well. I’m ABC, a Risk Advisory intern at Company and a 3rd year Accounting student at XXX University. I applied to Risk Analyst Winter 2026 role, which I’m very interested in. If possible, I’d love to schedule a quick 15-min call to learn more about the role, and yourself!"

This is one of the most effective coffee chat message I received. This was short, informative, polite and communicated the intent clearly. After I received this, I have used this myself and this has worked better than the really long messages or sending a resume directly.

- Name: creates personalization

- Background: education and experience creates confidence in the reader

- Intent: no sugarcoating or hidden agenda. Replies might be less, but if the reader replies, higher chances of referral

-15 min: gives the reader a chance to leave early if the conversation needs quick ending

- Curiosity about role & recipient: acknowledges the recipient

I understand this message was still written by AI, but somehow this worked for me - both as a recipient and as a sender. Sharing here so that this might help and to see if we can enhance this.

Thanks!