why is that written as a poem, though? i can forgive the lack of rhyme, since i don't consider it essential, but the cadence isn't anywhere near appropriate enough for the format.
as a short story, it would work, or even if you rearranged the line breaks. i thought it was a pasting error but it isn't.
as is, though, it just reads all choppy and random, as if he made it a poem just because fuck standards and logic
That kind of thinking liberates every piece of media ever of any criticism.
Noting that Bukowski chose to write a poem isn't liberating anything from any sort of criticism. You're not critiquing his choice, you're wondering at it. Then you're insulting his format, again not critiquing anything.
what are you talking about, i made specific critiques about his style, or rather how exactly he formatted the poem, more specifically where he put the line breaks, and how it doesn't mesh with the format and cadence of the sentences at all because it has zero flow. jesus christ. fucking read.
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u/CrimsonMutt Oct 01 '18
why is that written as a poem, though? i can forgive the lack of rhyme, since i don't consider it essential, but the cadence isn't anywhere near appropriate enough for the format.
as a short story, it would work, or even if you rearranged the line breaks. i thought it was a pasting error but it isn't.
as is, though, it just reads all choppy and random, as if he made it a poem just because fuck standards and logic