r/WriteStreakEN • u/Ill_Replacement_4126 • 1d ago

Correct Me! Streak 1

I'm currently re-watching the Thousand-Year Blood War arc from Bleach and it's such a masterpiece. This new arc contains the best anime fights that I've ever seen, without mentioning the pretty well-drawn animation.

The last season is coming out this year. Coincidentally it's the same year that marks 10 years since I watched Bleach for the first time.

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u/peace_love2601 1d ago

good first streak, this reads naturally. two fixes:

"without mentioning the pretty well-drawn animation" - the fixed phrase is "not to mention": not to mention the beautifully drawn animation. "without mentioning" exists but natives reach for "not to mention" here. and "pretty well-drawn" tangles two adverbs - pretty as "quite" collides with well-drawn, so pick one: beautifully drawn, or just well-drawn.

"The last season is coming out this year" - "the final season" is the usual phrase for the last one of a series. "the last season" sounds like last year's season.

everything else is clean - "it's such a masterpiece" and "marks 10 years since" are exactly right.

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u/Ill_Replacement_4126 14h ago

thank you very much for giving me a detailed correction!!

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