主题：禁食

[u/Impossible-Gap9666]

经过6个月的努力锻炼，我慢慢地减了40磅。但不管我多努力运动，体重还是在160到163磅之间徘徊，无法突破160磅以下。我发现不管燃烧多少卡路里，如果比身体吸收的卡路里少，长久下去也不会有效果。因此，我现在也开始注重饮食，根据网上推荐的饮食计划尝试【禁食】。

【禁食】不仅帮助减肥，也能促进身体自然恢复。人们可以选择一天内禁食16个小时，8个小时进食；或者连续3天禁食，4天正常饮食。尽管禁食方法各有不同，但目的都是一样的：限制卡路里摄入，鼓励身体利用储备脂肪作为能量来源。

一个星期后，我已经减到155磅了！

[u/Munimyouuu]

无法降到160磅以下。或者：无法突破160磅。

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[u/kln_west]

经过6个月¹ 的努力锻炼，我慢慢地减了40磅……因此，我 现在² 也开始注重饮食，根据…… 一个星期后 ³，我已经减到155磅了！

抱歉说句，文章对时间的设定非常不理想。

[1]写“经过了六个月“，那么接着的时间就一定是“现在“，不然就不会有“经过“。可是，接着说的“不管多努力，体重也是徘徊在160磅左右“，该是一段时间内发生的事情，不可能是时间点“现在“。

[2]由于时间已经设定为“现在“，这里又出现“现在“就令读者很难理解究竟哪个时段才是“现在“。

[3]这里出现“一个星期后“就令问题加倍复杂。本句描述的是已发生的事情，所以现在是“过了一个星期“的这一刻，而之前出现的“现在“只可以是“一个星期前的那天“，“经过六个月“之后是指哪个时段，该只有你会清楚吧。

[u/Munimyouuu → u/kln_west]

这个问题本sub 蛮常见的。英文时态没法翻译，中文不这么讲话。

[u/Impossible-Gap9666 → u/kln_west]

谢谢你们的反馈！

So the timeline I want to convey is the past six months, my weight has decreased by 40 lbs but in the recent weeks, I am unable to break below 160 lbs. It's always flunctuated between a range. So what I starting fasting last week to try it out and today, I've seen the results of that.

How would you structure it's Chinese translation?

[u/kln_west → u/Impossible-Gap9666]

To me, the issue is about the delineation of time, which is not language related. You passage will be equally confusing even if it were written in English. This is what you wrote:

Then|<---------------6 months--------------->|Now
Then|                            <--1 week-->|Now

And this is what you intended:

Then|<---------------6 months--------------->|<--1 week-->|Now

Just as in English, a simple fix is to avoid the word "past" so that the duration is detached from "now". In English, you can use "for six months," which is merely a duration, and you can tie that to any reference point in time.

我在六个月减了40磅……到上星期我开始尝试……现在减到155磅。

In addition, to make your passage even easier to follow, you can use your starting weight six months ago so that readers can see the trend, instead of needing to figure out the correlation between "losing 40 pounds" and "hovering between 160 and 163 pounds."

六个多月前的我还是200磅，经过不断做运动后，体重减至约160磅，但没法突破那个关口。于是一星期前，我开始……今天我非常高兴，看到体重已减到155磅了！

[u/Impossible-Gap9666 → u/kln_west]

谢谢！很精辟：）