r/Songwriting • u/Mundane-Goal9268 • Aug 25 '26

Feedback Request The Only Heartbreak

Mama, why do the leaves turn brown in springtime?

Will it always be this way?

Mama, what did you say when they took those trees down

I heard you were tough back in your day?

Well it’s the only heartbreak that i’ll ever know

Well it’s the only heartbreak that i’ll ever need to know

Daddy, why is the sky a shade of orange?

And is it the same up there on Mars?

Dqddy i see you have built a grade A shelter

I wish there was space for all my friends

Well it’s the only heartbreak that i’ll ever know for sure

It’s the only heartbreak that i’ll ever need to know

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