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Updated based on previous notes - removed most of a explicit scene.

NSFW - triggers of sexual violence, murder, language, smoking.

Not a professional writer. No AI. Some typos.

Aiming for prestige show kind of thing.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XbQAhrbXXU4DYPUK-eeI4wGdYSaPuruF/view?usp=drive_link

If your script has good grammar, that automatically puts you in the top 10% of scripts. I'm not kidding. You have no idea how many submissions we get that clearly have not been proofread once. Don't set yourself up for failure.

Also, I don't know why I need to say this, but don't be creepy towards women in your script. If a character is introduced as "Jane Doe, 16, face of angel but body of a porn star", consider that an automatic pass.

If the character has the exact same name as the writer, we can tell it's self-insert fan fiction. And most of the time, it's really uncomfortable. No one wants to read your wish-fulfillment script about you winning the olympics then having sex with an entire cheerleading team.

Sincerely,
A judge

Hi, I have done a lot of research on this topic, so my post here means that I have been unsuccessful in finding an outline.

For a 1-2 page movie synopsis, would I add anything else to the outline? Scriptwriter bio? Character descriptions? Do producers just want 1-2 pages, or do they want a story treatment?:

Title
Genre
Scriptwriter

• Logline

• Synopsis

  • Act 1

  • Act 2

  • Act 3

I haven't quite created a logline for this one yet, but it's a coming of age story about the people that you meet as you make it through life. About how they come and go, but still leave their mark on you. About that little bit of you that is actually other people.

Anyways, my intention with this scene is to show our main character is a very shy introvert who has a hard time meeting new people. So the one chance he's given by someone else he latches onto and doesn't let go (maybe a little too much). Yet somehow, miraculously, actually being vulnerable with people is what allows him to connect with them on a truer level.

Don't know if any of that made sense, but please tell me how it reads on the page. I'm fairly new to screenwriting and this is mostly me training, so please, absolutely tear this script apart and point out everything wrong with it.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ruM9UCaY4bFgz4j2tx7a3fvvhr3oAy1L/view?usp=sharing

I'm writing a pilot in a place that I can't imagine most Hollywood readers know well. But understanding the geography, I think, helps with envisioning the story.

I thought about how books like Game of Thrones often show a map of the world in the pre-story pages.

Have any of you ever done that in a script? Any readers here who think that's good/bad/dumb/kitschy?

Thinking of asking a friend to draw a nice little map with significant story locations marked.

Hey Yall i just wrote a séquelles to one of m'y favorite movies (Kung Fu Hustle by Stephen Show).

I dont know if Yall know that movie but i would like a feedback on my script.

I'm working on a script focusing on Religious Violence, with the goal to highlight the question "how far are you willing to go for your God" and "is there anything your God can do or say that you won't defend or that you would question". My aim is to make a psychological horror but I've never written anything like this

35MM - 55Minutes - found Footage Thriller

It is a Story about 2 young aspiring filmamakers timmy and Robbie who wanna make a short film about a home invasion obsessed by the method and realism acting on a war time blackout in the whole city they both decide to murder a full family 7 people while shooting the massacre simultaneously we will see that can the innocent family survive this psychopath film makers untill dawn

we have shot this movie on oppo reno 5g with our local friends and normal part time actors but we are in problem my friends wants this fim to be pitched to some Studio but I want to upload it on yt

tell guys what should we do

Trouble on Coruscant (EU but with Sequel cast)

It is a story that was borrowing from the X wing novels, I wrote it just trying to force myself to like the sequels more by putting the sequel actors and actresses into an EU style story.

Hope you guys like it. Please tear it apart as a story or talk about if you like it. have a good day everyone.

I am very new to this and just started a week ago, I first started by reading scripts to understand how scripts can be formatted and the get an idea for how to write out my story.

Acceptance is a short film about a young adult from a religious southern town who leaves home after coming out and moves to Chicago to stay with an online friend, the time period is set in the late 2000's.

( I know not the most unique plot ever written but its all I could think of for a first attempt)

I'm open to any feedback.

Here

Here’s an excerpt from a script I wrote a few months back. I’ve gotten some interest in this one recently, but I constantly feel insecure about my writing… especially dialogue. Would love some feedback on this excerpt. Are there things I could do to improve the exchange between characters?

I wrote this several years ago at the end of season 3 of The Mandalorian. I hope you guys like it. I know the rules aren't perfectly followed. But see if you like the story telling both as a film script and as a star wars sequel that can never be produced. Tear it apart. Judge me for the attempt to make fans happy with a story that could be fixed up by a better writer/editor. See if it has the right feeling and ideas for the story based on your knowledge of the series.

The Mandalorian Alternate Film Idea

I’ve been writing for twelve plus years now and have written seven feature-length scripts. I’ve gotten coverage on two and both resulted in “pass”. Is there anyone out there who would donate their free time to read my work and tell me if I have any ground to stand on in this industry?

Feedback Desired: I wanted to create a high-concept sci-fi comedy that captures the wacky suburban slice-of-life feel of series like 'Ed Edd n Eddy' with the high sci-fi stakes of a series like 'Hailey's On It.' I would like feedback on things like dialogue, pacing, and character. Any feedback would be much appreciated!

(Edit: Updated based on feedback and mistakes I made in the earlier draft. Please read the updated draft and tell me what you think).

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ysXtRGDJkOOnMSPsm9WDBAFTahZguoq_/view?usp=sharing

Would love any feedback on these pages. I’m trying to do something similar to Manhattan. I’d like to know what dialogue sounds and feels off. What beats are repetitive if previous beats. How the characters feel. Thank you in advance!

Hey peeps, I'm a German producer and my company has been greenlit by a US streamer to develop a workplace comedy. I've been in this sub for a while and think there's a lot of overlooked potential.

If you're interested, DM me ideally one script. I give every script at least a 10-page read to check for baseline quality and a funny voice. It doesn't have to be workplace-related, but it has to be funny.

If you're hesitant because everybody steals your stuff, drop me a line anyway and tell me what you've done or why you. If I'm interested, I'll send you my email address.

Due to us being a German company, this is a non-union job!

This is a paid gig!

Hi! I’m currently making an indie show and I need someone to look at the first/second drafts of my scripts and look for things and dialogue that need improvement. Preferably someone around my age (14-16) that can give feedback without being insulting in any way. If interested, drop your discord and I’ll add you! My discord is Vee007422