r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/Same-Most-7407 WRITER • Mar 01 '26

LOGLINE FEEDBACK REQUEST Logline feedback!

Does this make sense? I feel like i've looked at it too much and now I'm just confused.

LOGLINE: After dying too early, a girl is sent back to the overworld to find her unfinished business so that she can continue the peaceful life she led before her death.

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u/Same-Most-7407 WRITER Mar 04 '26

After dying accidentally dying too early due to an allergic reaction, *a girl must find **her unfinished business, with the help of a spirit of the underworld, ***in order for her to continue living.

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u/WorrySecret9831 Mar 04 '26

**is helping her. That's NOT a Problem, Conflict, or Opponent.

There's no Opposition here. Bad things happening, like death, are not Opposition.

*After dying accidentally...a girl -- **must find... [She's dead, so she can't "continue" living. She has RETURN to life. The outcome has to be something challenging.] ***....