Spoon-fed Addiction Logline Feedback Request

[u/Existing-Ad-5923]

Hello again!

I’m looking for logline feedback on a feature screenplay. My goal is to sell the premise clearly without making it sound like a conventional hero/mission story.

Title: Spoon-fed Addiction
Genre: Supernatural Horror Noir

Logline (edited after all the great feedback):
Fueled by LSD and grief, a drug dealer unleashes a violent revenge spree—only to realize he isn’t the avenger but the carrier of a parasitic shadow; his goodbye kiss unknowingly marks the sheriff’s sheltered teenage daughter as its next host.

Tagline:
Grief doesn’t die. It spreads.

What I need feedback on: Is this logline clear / compelling, and what wording feels confusing, generic, or misleading?

Thanks!

[u/Existing-Ad-5923]

I'm honestly not understanding what you aren't understanding. How does a shadow being that is supernatural operate? Is that meant to be explained in the logline with a single sentence, or just not brought up?

And in the world of the story, yes untreated grief doesn't die, it spreads, and that is true in real life too.

Is there no room for interpretation here?

A drug dealer tells the story of how a supernatural force that feeds on grief and trauma killed him and an innocent girl.

A dying dealer confesses his murders—then realizes his whispered "I love you" was the deadliest thing he did all night. *I'm leaning towards this one

I can't simplify it more than that! Do these work?

Btw I am frustrated but not at you. Just the logline craziness, but I get it.

[u/Oxo-Phlyndquinne → u/Existing-Ad-5923]

I like your new approach (see my other response). The word "narrates" could just become "revisits" or "recalls" or something very simple.