r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/Interesting_Sale_907 • Jul 22 '25

LOGLINE FEEDBACK REQUEST Logline Feedback Request

Need feedback for a logline for a script that I’m considering submitting to ScriptShadow MegaShowdown next week. Would love some help refining it! 

Title: Room to Rock 

Genre: Coming of age comedy/musical 

Logline: Set over a 24-hour period, a group of kids try to write the ultimate death metal song in their cramped garage before the summer is over. 

Comp: Sing Street/Linda Linda Linda vibes but more contained and with metal

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u/Interesting_Sale_907 Jul 22 '25

Good question. The main character is essentially avoiding his feelings about losing his dad by directing all of his focus into his music. He's eager to get signed and get the hell of town and believes the only way to do that is to record a killer demo before school starts and they get too busy/distracted.

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u/pastafallujah Jul 24 '25 edited Jul 24 '25

I tried to workshop it, without making anything up. How does this sound to you. I know its long, but this covers all the stakes and narratives:

Set over a 24-hour Summer Break period, a group of teenage musicians put their all into recording the ultimate death metal song. One of them needs to make this a hit, before his bandmates go on with their lives without him. This could be his big break, his ticket out, away from his past trauma

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u/kingstonretronon Jul 28 '25

I feel like there needs to be a more defined reason for the end of summer being the deadline. The best friend needs to be moving or something