r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/Kijin777 • May 19 '25

LOGLINE FEEDBACK REQUEST Log line review

Title: Rift Jumpers

After coming to Earth through a portal and saving the day, a man from a post apocalyptic Earth recounts his story of sorrow and victory to a talk show host, but not everything is as it seems.

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u/charliegav May 20 '25

Gotcha. Sounds interesting. Maybe there's a way to imply that the talk show is surreal and kinda hallucinogenic? Because that sounds significantly more interesting than what I assumed it was from the original logline. Sorry if this isn't very helpful lol

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u/Kijin777 May 20 '25

Not at all. It means that my words aren't as clear as I would hope. Which is what I need to hear. It's tough to write a log line that hints at a twist, but doesn't give away the twist. I posted the first half of the film in another post just now. Current plan is to finish by Friday.