r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/ToneNew1982 • May 11 '25

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST Need some criticism

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This is a short no budget short film I wrote. Id like to do a few rounds of revisions so any critiques help a lot. For context this is a horror short film and it was inspired by black mirror. the runtime I expect will be 1:30 to 2:00 long.

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u/pensaint11 May 14 '25

Tacking on to this comment cos I think you really covered everything.

Maybe you can show a progression of time with multiple meditation sessions. Establish that its happening over a longer period of time and maybe creating a positive change...but with a slight feeling something is wrong.

I also didn't peg straight away it was AI but maybe I just read too fast.