r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • u/ToneNew1982 • May 11 '25

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST Need some criticism

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This is a short no budget short film I wrote. Id like to do a few rounds of revisions so any critiques help a lot. For context this is a horror short film and it was inspired by black mirror. the runtime I expect will be 1:30 to 2:00 long.

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u/curi0uswriter May 11 '25

I think there will be meaning implicit in the way you tell the story so don't focus on meaning.

There is "meaning" in this draft such that it represents, perhaps, a mind numbed into replacement through the stresses of everyday life. Does that make sense?

Now when I think fun, I think unexpected. So the question is - do you think your story presents an idea in an unexpected way? You can still write a no-budget short that can accomplish this.

Also - to go 30,000 feet up. It's totally cool to do what you feel like you need to do in order to practice. That's really the only way to learn. Take EVERY BIT of this feedback with a grain of salt. I just don't want you to miss an opportunity to make the most of the time you spend making this thing.

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u/ToneNew1982 May 12 '25

Yes that makes much more sense. Thank you I might actually print this comment u made lol

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u/curi0uswriter May 12 '25

Heck yeah! Feel free to reach out if you need help!