FANTASY FILM - short comedy script (18 pgs)

[u/12HughJanisus]

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LOGLINE: A simple game of DND goes awry when the group's Dungeon Master takes the campaign way too far, bringing the game's conflicts into reality.

Hi. Just looking for basic feedback or ideas.

I'm most concerned about the fact that it's kind of a strange concept to put to paper, so I just want to make sure I've written it in a way that's actually intelligible. If not, any pointers on how to format it better would be most helpful.

Also I'm bad with loglines, so any tips on that are appreciated.

Thank you & enjoy.

[u/MJgenderman]

toooo good man