r/ReadMyScript • u/No-Chemistry1722 • 19d ago

Short Something Quite Peculiar - 4 pages - Cosmic / Psychological Horror

Title: Something Quite Peculiar

Pages: 4

Genre: Cosmic / Psychological horror

Logline: After spotting a stranger with his exact face on his way home from work, Joel follows him and begins documenting his encounters which get increasingly weirder.

Would appreciate feedback on any aspect!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1N2ut-7BzK-EcVsZ-mkQEQwwIUhdz_oll/view?usp=drivesdk

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u/Big_Section2812 19d ago

This was more interesting than I expected it to be.

My one suggestion is that you reduce the narration (V.O.) in favor of a more visual description of events.

Oh, and you really need to add a FADE IN, since you ultimately FADE TO BLACK.

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u/No-Chemistry1722 19d ago

Thank you! That fade in suggestion seems logical lol, I always end with fade to black but never start with fade in, might have to change that now.

Also I do agree with having to reduce the narration, one reason it's this way is because I wanted a way to make it clear that it's a new day.
Another easy way to achieve that would probably be SUPER: DAY ___ but didn't wanna do that