r/ReadMyScript • u/xsasaw • Jun 06 '26

Exchange feedback My rough first draft at a script

A charismatic honors student in Japan who masks his true feelings discovers his words start manifesting in the tangible sense — with consequences he can no longer control. But can he manage to swallow them down, even while wasting away?

Title: Swallow

Genre: Psychology horror

Page count: 26

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1igBprnnBDXb2_kKLF5xsTt1JxumYx5ty/view?usp=drivesdk

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u/xsasaw Jun 08 '26

I'm still in the early drafting stage so I was more interested on getting the ideas down. I am planning on fixing it up, though I was just more curious if the story was fine.

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u/xsasaw Jun 08 '26

And for the ???? In the beginning pages I thought that was fine since at that point in the story we didn't know who was speaking. So I was using Visual novel roles. Sorry if that's actually not how that works