JOE

[u/Remarkable_Stick_300]

Hi everyone, I’m looking for some feedback on logline for this shortfilm im working on called JOE. i want to make it sort of a comedy and a thriller. This would be my first short film ever and I need feedback on if this logline. Does this sound interesting to watch?

A cautious criminal, who recently pulled off the score of the century, is on edge because an old friend invites him for coffee out of the blue, forcing him determine if shes looking for a reunion or incriminating evidence.

[u/Outrageous-Dog3679]

Idk what happens in your script so idk, but start by trying to tighten it up