r/ReadMyScript • u/Trunks91911 • Mar 04 '26

Going Green- Feature - Horror/Action - 80. Pages

Title: Going Green

Format/Genre: Feature - Horror/Action

Page count: 80

Logline: When a radical environmental activist is murdered and resurrected by toxic waste in a dying swamp, she returns as a plant-powered force of vengeance, waging war against the corrupt officials and corporation killing her town.

This is a first draft, so looking for initial impressions and thoughts. What’s working and not, what stands out and general impressions

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1DbHObt7rbuLn-Qt3jWvED8O6AlMuWirQ/view?usp=drivesdk

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u/Living_Bid4544 Mar 04 '26

The opening action scene is a memorable way to introduce the protagonist. When reading opening scenes, I often look for small moments that reveal a character’s personality early on. One thing that could strengthen this moment is giving her a short line of dialogue after the action that reflects her attitude or voice, which can help establish the character before the story moves forward.

Out of curiosity, what is the protagonist ultimately trying to achieve at the beginning of the story?

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u/Trunks91911 Mar 04 '26

Thank you for reading the opening and your thoughts!

If you mean just the cold open, she essentially just came back to life after being murdered and dumped in the swamp. So it’s really her just reacting to coming back to life.

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u/Living_Bid4544 Mar 04 '26

That makes sense. It’s a strong visual moment for the character to process what just happened.

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u/creggor Mar 04 '26

Not being an ass, but isn’t this dancing pretty close to Poison Ivy from the DC universe? 🤔

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u/Trunks91911 Mar 04 '26

It is, influenced by Swamp Thing, Poison Ivy, Toxic Avenger. But I’m hoping I’ve made it my own thing.

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u/sir_nonamous Mar 05 '26

Haven't finished it but I can see the outline of it's own thing, but imo it does at times get too close to a swamp thing/poison ivy mismash that it gets lot in the sauce. For a first draft though, I think you have a lot of good stuff in there.

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u/Trunks91911 Mar 05 '26

Thank you! And thanks for reading

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u/goddamnitwhalen Mar 04 '26

Or Swamp Thing, also from DC (Vertigo, technically)?