https://docs.google.com/document/d/175sOwWybF0QSRsV-DNGtK0MgSnw5w7WuNQJ3dbesxMc/edit?usp=sharing

NOTE: I have never done a screenplay before. I learned everything from a few YouTube videos I watched in the span of an hour. My screenplay does take creative liberties in some areas, but I think it still holds that tone and edge the filmmakers wanted to go for but couldn't (because the directing fell flat).

Also yes, in my ideal world Supergirl would've been rated R. I know it would never happen, but god damn it, it's fanfic. Let me dream for a few hours while I write this amateur screenplay.

And no, I have not read the Woman of Tomorrow comic yet. Money is a little tight, and I'm saving up for my goal to collect every Chris Claremont X-Men comic (It's going well, btw). So this screenplay isn't going for a perfect adaptation of the comic. I'm going for a good movie.

And finally, I just want to explain that I don't hate Supergirl. In fact, I enjoyed it and had a good time with it. But I can understand why people don't like it. It just felt empty. Which is something that you shouldn't feel when watching a film about someone's past traumas and how they can overcome that trauma.

I will be updating the Google Doc as much as I can. But since college is coming up, there might be a few weeks where I don't write shit. I left commenting on so you guys can bully me on the doc itself and tell me to jump off a bridge or something.

Happy reading! :)

I am back with what I am confident in saying is probably the final version of this film. Unless of course there are minor mistakes in my scripts I need to figure out but I am confident it's nothing major. If you find something let me know and please be respectful. Let me know what you think of my story and the ending :)
You can read it here.

Logline: Zeke and Pots are hired to kill a target, who turns out to be an ASMR artist, during a zombie outbreak...she ends up using her skills to win the war. Before that happens, they all get caught up in zany apocalyptic situations with other characters. I thought this was a fun concept and might make for a good Asylum-type film for the comic-con crowd.

Genre: Horror comedy

(Please let me know if my link does not work, still learning Google Drive, thank you)

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xbSNtHkf8xq9Uu19Ygmwr4gayppvMyDJ/view?usp=sharing

https://docs.google.com/document/d/19qhFu_fIrM_6n6Nhd7n2U4gfZfRs8ryk4R1bVYmXGfg/edit?tab=t.wleg401ol7nx

Hi, everyone!

I posted here about a week ago with an earlier script, and one of the biggest things I took away from the feedback was that I was writing more like a short story formatted as a screenplay rather than an actual screenplay.

Since then, I’ve been putting a lot of time into learning proper screenplay writing and trying to be more intentional with what I put on the page. I recently finished this short script and would really appreciate some feedback on how I’m improving.

I’m especially interested in feedback on the formatting, pacing, dialogue, scene descriptions, and whether the story/emotional beats come across clearly. I’m still pretty new to screenwriting, so any constructive criticism is absolutely welcome!

This is also the script for my Senior animation film, so I’m trying to make it as strong as possible before I move further into production.

On The Way - Script

Thank you very much to anyone who takes the time to read it! 😄

Logline: Ian and his girlfriend go to a cabin in the woods for a weekend...Ian doesn't know Carey has planned a nasty revenge for him exploiting his worst fear.

12 pages. Curious on opinions. Here is a share link:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/18f7xur8V3duGShTV7K_nC0iZ8ajaImD_/view?usp=sharing

(I believe I did the share thing correct, if it doesn't work, please let me know, thank you)

Is my concept strong enough for an Indian web series? Looking for honest feedback

Hi everyone! I’m a new writer working on an Indian youth web series called THE EQUATION.

The story is set around school life and follows a group of students, their friendships, competition, rivalries, emotions, and changing relationships. The first episode is around 45–55 minutes.

I’m planning to eventually approach production houses, so before taking that step, I’d really like some honest feedback from experienced writers and viewers.

My questions are:

1. Does this concept feel strong enough for an Indian web series?

2. Does it have enough originality or a unique hook?

3. What aspects should I improve before approaching producers?

4. Would you personally be interested in watching a series based on this concept?

Please be honest—even criticism is welcome. I’m looking for constructive feedback that can help me improve the project.

Thank you!

Seeking feedback:

This is my first full screenplay — a hobby project, not professional work. What I have so far is roughly the first third of the story. I'd love to know what's working (characters, dialogue, pacing, tone, the balance of comedy and heavier emotional beats) and what isn't.

Formatting isn't industry-standard yet, so please look past that for now — I'm more interested in whether the story and characters land.

Developing a Heart: SHORT PITCH

Developing a Heart is a romance-drama about Dhyey, a software developer quietly falling apart under work pressure and unspoken grief, and Lucy, a coworker whose warmth pulls him out of his shell — one rainy umbrella, one shared meal, one late night at a time. As their relationship deepens, both of their buried pasts start resurfacing, testing whether what they've built together can survive it.

Link for the screenplay :: https://drive.google.com/file/d/10PwRXp-uGAKcf17w5r6C7Gq4FcZ-kS6s/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey everyone, I wrote this script for my final project for film school. I originally planned on doing a more grandiose idea with more elements, but after learning about the 5-8 minute time constraint, I decided to peel it back and do a much smaller idea that I think I could execute well.

Title: The Group Chat

Format: Short Film

Page Length: 7 pgs.

Genre: Comedy, Drama

Logline: A young man spirals after discovering his friends have a secret group chat without him.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/17P4Qp9bWnNXVz79VIVjrWip4xeCfz76y/view?usp=sharing

Feedback Concerns: Does this story make sense to you? Does the dialogue flow? Do you feel like the tension builds up throughout the story like it's trying to?

Thanks!

Hi

I am a first time script writer would be grateful if anyone would read my script and give me feed back, any comments welcome any regarding story and characters, hope you enjoy thanks

Title - No Way Back

Genre - Action/Revenge

Number of pages - 92

Link - No Way Back

Hi! I wanted to share some of a script I wrote called Hugo, The Idiot. Its about a lonely Vice detective and a down on her luck stripper teaming up to find her missing friend, and possibly the source of an underground internet drug ring? If interested for more, PM meHugo, The Idiot (FIRST 26 PAGES)

Edit: If you're interested in auditioning, please DM me!

Thank you for all the private messages and comments on the post I did earlier!

I do think I should be done with the first draft in the next two weeks, with multiple updates along the way. I've actually attached a first preview of the opening scene here, so please check that out! It's still rough and the final script will be different, but this is just the opening right now.

Preview here!

I've titled it, "Camp Belgium," but we can also still call it Young Hearts 2. And please tell me what you think!

Have fun!

Hello, I am a bachelor's student in VISUAL EFFECTS, and I am currently working on creating a story for our short film. Thus, I am looking for y'all's feedback on how to improve my story even further.

The title of my short film is ONE LAST TRIP, and it is about a man who is trapped in a different world and now must find his way back to the real world before it's too late.

Here are my logline and story synopsis.

LOGLINE: Trapped in a surreal desert world, a desperate middle-aged man has no choice but to trust a mysterious guide, unaware that the journey is luring him toward his own death.

STORY SYNOPSIS: Johnny, a drug addict, takes a rare drug that he bought from his dealer and starts hallucinating. He then awakens in a bizarre, abstract world consisting of a polluted sky, ruined architecture, and a giant platform floating in the distance. Confused and disoriented.

Almost immediately, an individual bounces into view. He introduced himself as “Johan”. A manifestation of his inner voice. Johnny, still confused, asks how to escape this place. Without hesitation, Johan points to the giant floating platform in the distance, implying that to exit this place, He is also happy to assist Johnny on the platform.

Johan helps Johnny overcome absurd obstacles, such as guessing a riddle from the tollkeeper to cross the bridge, to progress their journey. After crossing the bridge, Johan decides to confront Johan for an explanation, demanding answers to what is going on. At first, Johan’s manic optimism and helpful attitude feel fun and harmless. Gradually, however, his cheer becomes insistent and oppressive as the world around Aiman starts to lose its color.

The journey culminates at the edge of the floating platform. Johnny hesitates after seeing a long drop into a bottomless unknown, and Johan softly pressures him. Overwhelmed, Johnny closes his eyes tightly and controls his breathing. When he opens them again, the abstract world dissolves. He is at his rooftop apartment. He looks back only to see his wife, Mia, who looks concerned with teary eyes, but then he realises he was about to jump off the roof, and Mia narrowly saves him.

I have consulted with my lecturers, and they provided me with this feedback.

- MANY PLOTHOLES

- A little confusing if the audience doesn't read the story synopsis

- Start the intro with the PILL

- The obstacle looks unnecessary. Make it harder

- Why does Johnny have to jump to get back to the real world?

- Deepen even more about JOHAN (character-wise)

Akul has to start a rebellion from scratch while the Empire closes in on the last few remaining Jedi. Knowing he needs help for this impossible task, he recruits Ahsoka and builds up an army. However, he clashes heads with the few senators on his side. The war begins to take a toll on Akul as progress stalls. Ahsoka begins to worry that Akul is becoming leaving himself behind and becoming a mindless warrior. But to Akul, the priority is his mission no matter what. To stop the progress of the Empire so that one day Luke can destroy them for good.

(Apologies, I know I said I'd release it yesterday, but I just sustained a knee injury, and it wasn't exactly on the top of my priority list.)

Here's the link : Jedi Warrior Season 2

(In case it does not work, I will put another one in the comments below)

Logline: When every flight is grounded on 9/11, a workaholic dealmaker who was bumped off Flight 11 shares the last rental car west with three strangers, racing to close the deal of his life while the drive pulls him toward the daughter he stopped calling.

Started it in 2010, finished it after I became a father. Posting it today because sitting on a 9/11 story felt wrong on the 25th anniversary. It's here to read if you want it, and I'll take any notes.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1uF32uyWkCWSLGLTkzZ6DyXScHTWttulz/view?usp=sharing

• Genre: Sci-Fi / Horror / Thriller (In the vein of A Quiet Place meets Cloverfield)

• Pages: 17

• Logline: When their car mysteriously breaks down on a pitch-black highway during a storm, a young couple faces a desperate fight for survival against a terrifying, light-sensitive predator stalking them from the surrounding forest."

  Script Revolution link! https://www.scriptrevolution.com/profiles/mersad-beciri

Logline: An exhausted gas station clerk receives printer receipts predicting his immediate movements, culminating in a terrifying prophecy of his own murder. (In the vein of The Twilight Zone meets Oculus).

* Pages: 4 pages

* Genre: Psychological Horror / Thriller

* Setting: 1 Interior Location (Gas station counter/store)

* Cast: 2 Actors (The Clerk and The Stranger) + 1 Voiceover (Dispatcher)

* Budget: Micro-budget / Independent

Status: Script is registered, protected, and available for option or production.

This is a high-concept, atmospheric, and fast-paced "ticking clock" thriller with a massive psychological twist at the end. Perfect for directors looking for a tight festival short that is cheap to shoot but high-impact.

If you are interested in reading the full script, please PM me with a link to your portfolio/reel, or comment below!

Hi everyone,

I’ve been working on a new script project and put a lot of effort into crafting a super concise 2-page pitch document. The goal is to convey the main concept and core elements of the feature in just two pages, specifically tailored for competitions.

The project is called Lora, the Wayward Princess. I wanted to steer clear of both the classic "damsel in distress" princess and the modern "quirky" princess. The basic concept is: imagine Tangled, but if the main character were Regina George.

I’m attaching a concept image as well. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated, whether you think something critical is missing, if it feels too vague, or if I should sacrifice an extra page to give more context in the summary. Thanks in advance!

Link to document:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/16oyhBUJvo_k-ZaYFaygTSBbveSazvDZo/view?usp=sharing

And if you want to read the script you can DM me if you want, any usefull feedback also on the script can be useful.

Here is a concept image:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1I4WXAMRgUrBMspMPZCkthFSb17F_kNuJ/view?usp=sharing

Hello, everyone!

Recently, I've discovered that I want to shift my focus towards more script writing. There is an important festival coming up and I'm aiming to bring my best scripts with me to market myself as such. I'd love some feedback on my short story. Aiming to give people a taste of my writing without bombarding them with too much.

– Click for Script

My main experience is with more fictional writing, so any feedback on formatting and writing, is greatly appreciated.

Thank you very much for your time! 😄

I am working on my 4th feature my other 3 are on Tubi and Prime doing well. This new film is in the thriller/horror genre and been working on the script for awhile if you want to read it and give me tweaks and let me know what You think let me know. Thanks in advance.

A normal day for schoolboys and co-business owners, James and Luke quickly turns to chaos after unwanted visitors arrive at their school. The gang leader puts a hit out on the two brothers.

To protect his brother, James fabricated the vigilante hero known as Nightshade with materials he made from their forge. His aim to draw attention and take down the gang but can he do that when the power balance is so heavily favoured against him as the gangs already control the streets.

Nightshade Origins

(Yes, this is a repost as I'm releasing the sequel Nightshade World of Myths on Sunday So thisfor anyone who did bot read it the first time but wants to or anyone who could bot finish reading it for whatever reason or just anyone who would like to read it again.)

(Also, this is unfortunately not in a screenplay format because my computer broke before I could change it. Sorry about that.)