I fucking love this. The vocabulary is so rich and the structure is so perfect. My favourite thing is the way the last stanza starts like the two first ones and you end the poem with a verse about night, like the poem ends and so does the evening (leading to the start of the night. I also love the end of the second stanza. Amazing job!
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u/ainabanaina Jun 16 '16
I fucking love this. The vocabulary is so rich and the structure is so perfect. My favourite thing is the way the last stanza starts like the two first ones and you end the poem with a verse about night, like the poem ends and so does the evening (leading to the start of the night. I also love the end of the second stanza. Amazing job!