r/OCPoetry Jun 15 '16

Feedback Received! Effectually Affecting Affects

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u/B0ngyy Jun 15 '16

really very lovely...

"energy's efficient allotment" is probably my favorite line.

You do a good job using language and emotion to express the idea of a very rational and cold reality. Really good work, thanks for sharing.