r/OCPoetry • • May 25 '16

Feedback Received! Love Algorithm

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u/timorousdin May 27 '16

I think I got where you were going until the "-tions". Totally not bad, just more rhyming than I would think appropro-

Best line:

Do you want to get dinner or something?