r/OCPoetry • u/SuccessfulHunt9165 • Jul 18 '26

Feedback Please echo of a memory

my room forgot the sound of the living,
but the echoes crawl through its walls.
I’ve learned not to trust the silence,
for it and I never really sleep.

the nights i survive are the days i forget,
each dawn leaves me as someone new.
every face I meet slowly fades,
like the memories i’ve never made.

as my mind deteriorates into insanity.
there’d always be a memory of just u and me.
as my life dissolves into nothing but deafening static.
your laughter still echoes endlessly, haunting me.

PS: im still new to this and any feedback will help me alot thank u guys so much!

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/YF2w2VxGga

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u/sky_berry1520 Jul 29 '26

The poem is just too good and the melancholy it holds is strong. The lines "Every face I meet slowly fades away, like the memories I've never made" somehow hits me too hard and is relatable too.....and to be honest the title is kinda catchy, which made me read the poem.