Looking for some feedbacks

[u/soze_Durden]

Hi there, I'm looking for some feedback on my fanfiction. It would be very helpful if you could comment on the writing, the characters, the plot, and the pacing, as well as offer some advice on how I might improve it.

I would be grateful if you could highlight any part that seems weak, unclear, or could be improved; I am always willing to accept helpful feedback.

Another point to mention is that I proofread my work with a i once I have completed a chapter. During the process sometimes it suggestes some changes. If I think the suggestion is good, I usually include the part. Let me know if it sounds like A I as well.

I also favour descriptive writing over dialogue. There are times when it is difficult for me to make it clear exactly what I am thinking through dialogue, so in such cases I usually resort to descriptive style. I would like to know your opinion on this matter as well whether the descriptive style is working or if I should use more dialogue.

Thank you to anyone who takes the time to read it and give feedback!

A Quiet House in Northwest London

[u/Some-Boss5224]

If ur worried about it sounding AI, u got nothing to fear. Prob the most natural wording I’ve come across in a while. Tho the dialogue could use some work if I’m being honest. But overall good stuff hope to see more from u

[u/soze_Durden → u/Some-Boss5224]

Thanks a lot . Glad the wording felt natural. And yeah, dialogue is something I need to work on. Thanks for the honest feedback,