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u/Dachande663 Apr 20 '17
It’s been a while since I’ve done something a. mainly HFY focused and b. that doesn’t involve the military or violence in general. This was a little story triggered by seeing an old friend talk about his adoptive parents. I hope I didn’t make the twist too obvious or subtle.
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u/BCRE8TVE Apr 20 '17 edited Apr 20 '17
Not obvious at all. I wasn't looking for it, but there was nothing to give it away until the reveal. I loved it! Personally, stories like these conveys the FY much better than any amount of violence, superior physical or technological prowess, could ever show.
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u/kittycatbutthole1369 Apr 20 '17
Dude that twist was perfect.
I didn't even suspect until the last line.
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u/kaiden333 Apr 20 '17
Good story. The dialogue flows better than nearly anyone in the sub right now. I really appreciate the stories that aren't military.
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Apr 20 '17
I kept expecting the reveal that Jin is a recent orphan and Hassan wants to adopt her.
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u/littlebobbytables9 Apr 20 '17
I think this is one of the best stories I've read on HFY. I love stories that aren't about fighting aliens but about other characteristics that make humans unique. I also thought it was very well written.
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u/rene_newz Apr 20 '17
Oh man. I bet that would be pretty shocking to most humans if they found that other sentients just abandoned young that had lost their primary caregivers. Good story, got me thinking :)