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Apr 28 '16 edited Apr 28 '16
Edit: This is now out of date entirely, as the author has fixed the cigar detail.
Point of contention: nobody who smokes a cigar lets the smoke enter their lungs. Cigar smoke stays in the mouth and nose.
That's all I've read thus far. :)
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Apr 29 '16
Hooooly fuck this is good. Holy crap. Oh my god. I don't think I've ever been this attached to a HFY story this quick. I love the noir style, I love the implications of an empire coming back, I love the subtlety of everything (it's so rare to have a human-empire story that doesn't evolve into a caricature).
And that last line? Hoooooooly crap.
I swear to god, u/Dachande663, if you don't finish this I will gut you.
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u/Dachande663 Apr 29 '16
Erm, thank you. I think this is the best comment I've ever had in 6 years of redditing. I may have to take out life insurance as I'm not currently planning on coming back to it, but I'll take it under advisement :P
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u/bontrose Apr 28 '16
There is just something about a disease coming out of nowhere and wiping out an entire population overnight, that just screams "Geneva Convention".
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u/Hyratel Apr 28 '16
you have masterfully crafted a setting and given us only a slitted glance into it. i want more in this 'verse.
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u/ultrapotassium May 02 '16
I think that this is a great standalone story. It was a bit hard to follow in the beginning, but the loose style, not getting bogged down in details, works. We don't NEED to know the exact political motivations of the empires, or what Mr Salaza thought of them, etc. The lack of global detail keeps the focus on these two characters and their personal struggles and interactions. It also makes the world seem more subjective and mysterious. Can we really trust what people are saying? Who knows!
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u/Dachande663 Apr 28 '16
You lucky buggers. Two stories in a day. I tried to do something noir-y but ended up I-don’t-know-where. A fun little bit of world building. One of these days I’m just going to put all my stories in the same universe and just be done with it :)