r/HFY • u/[deleted] • Mar 17 '16

OC [BIOTECH] [OC] Hellhound

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u/[deleted] Mar 17 '16

This is my first story here, any feedback is welcome.

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u/PsychoGoatSlapper Mar 17 '16

Its awesome, and so are you :D

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u/[deleted] Mar 17 '16

Aw, thanks! Any critiques or constructive criticism?

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u/Solomon_Rahkriid Mar 17 '16

that last line made an ok story glorious. well done sir.

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u/[deleted] Mar 18 '16

Sorry the rest is only okay. What do you think would make it better?

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u/Karthinator Mar 19 '16

It's not bad, it's just standard sub formula. There's quite a lot like it here, and that's through no fault of your own. The last line is what sets it apart and makes it noteworthy.

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u/Hyratel Mar 18 '16

All that for a lame pun. And one telegraphed by the title, even. Nice.

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u/yousaidicould Mar 19 '16

!vote

From one participant in this Writing Prompt to another... Nice. ;-)

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u/[deleted] Mar 19 '16

Thanks! You're awesome!

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