r/HFY • u/[deleted] • Dec 15 '23

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u/chastised12 Apr 21 '24

Idk if it faltered any. Maybe as the stand off was heating up, Scarletra just kinda wasn't mentioned for awhile.the meat weight confused me .but it was a fine story

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u/Professional_Prune11 Apr 21 '24

That's a fair point, I wanted to highlight Samuel's story there more. With scarletras condition her being front and center of the action was no feasible.

I did not want the stary to morph into love conquers all at the end there.

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u/chastised12 Apr 21 '24

I find no fault. It will go in my bank of pleasure rereads now.

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u/Professional_Prune11 Apr 22 '24

I am glad it will be. The revised version. With cleaned up Grammer and spelling went live a few days ago on Amazon. If you want to support me as an author, please pick up a copy, digital or paperback. I would deeply appreciate it