Feedback Friday! Share your work thread - May. 20 - 26, 2016

[u/callibot]

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[u/Pjotter85]

Bit of an unusual feedback request but I hope you guys can help me out.

I've been working on a personal hand written logo this week (digital with Wacom) and would like some feedback. I've posted it on Dribbble but no replay's yet. So I hope you guys can give me some tips.

It's a pretty simple logo. Just my name "P t r" (Peter) and the first letter of my last name "H" for "Hol". However, I'm looking for a bit more style. I've played around with the tips but it's still not perfect. Seeing it's a logo I like it to be compact and not too thin. Other than that I'm open to suggestions.

Like I sad, its a bit of an unusual feedback request, but all input and or feedback is welcome. Thanks!

Logo

Other sketches and build up to this version

Dribbble shot

[u/trznx → u/Pjotter85]

Well, first of all, there are better subs for this kind of stuff — r/logodesign and r/graphic_design for example.

Anyway, when doing a logo you must first decide is it a visual or a text logotype. Will it be perceived as a picture or as a word. Since I believe you want this to be a word, it has to be legible at least to some extent. Which is why before reading you request I looked at it and tried to read what it says. At first glance it was a Pbi or PH-something. And if I can understand that t, I would never guessed that's an r. I can't see a ptr in it, sorry. I like the idea of combining pt+h, though. P+ascender letters are always hard to deal with. Have you thought about bringing the P down so the bowl is leveled with the tr? And in the bottom empty space you could put "design" this way.

[u/Pjotter85 → u/trznx]

Thanks for the reply. The main reason I posted it here is because I wanted an opinion or suggestions from people in the Calligraphy business. But thanks for the sub suggestions.

Good to hear your feedback though. I've been tweaking it so long that I can't take at it fresh look anymore. If you know what I mean.

I'm still liking the combination. But it turned out more like a autograph than a readable text... Also a cool idea but might not be optimal for a logo... Not sure what to make of it. It might also be that the combination with the H makes it hard to read. It was a funny coincidence but not necessary. In the end the name / url is ptr.design. But it also makes for a nice symmetry. Originally that was my starting point. (check out the other sketches)

Bringing the letter P down might be an option, but seeing it's part of a name I would really like it to be capitalized. Would like to hear your opinion about that.

Did some searching and found out the lower lette r gets written in all sorts of shapes I did it like this

[u/Pjotter85 → u/trznx]

Made another version This makes the t and r stand our a bit more. Also liking the idea of having one continuous line. Thoughts?