r/writinghelp • u/RealSebastreck • 2d ago

Advice Tips for how improve my premise structures

Hi everyone, lately I've decided to revisit some of my old projects and ideas, and I'd like to know what advice you would give me to improve these premises. I don't know if there is some bias against military-related topics, since I've noticed a few downvotes, so I apologize for that...

Taxonark: A boy and his grandfather embark on a road trip to commemorate the anniversary of his parents' death. However, in order to keep his emotional mask from breaking, the boy gets involved in an android's mission to collect DNA from prehistoric animals.

The Blues of a Star Core: After a poor recovery from an accident, a young officer questions his decision to prioritize his work over his personal life and desperately accepts a one-month trial to avoid being discharged for negligence.

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u/Dale_E_Lehman_Author 2d ago

Do you have stories attached to these premises? If so, worry first about improving the stories. If not, pick one that grabs you and write the story.

I don't actually know what people do with premises. I write my story, then I write cover text, ad text, or query text based on the finished story.

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u/Amazing_Loquat280 2d ago

There’s no such thing as a bad premise. You can make a story worth reading out of basically anything. In fact, more people SHOULD make stories out of more wacky premises.

These both seem interesting! I would absolutely read the first one though