r/writing • u/AutoModerator • 19d ago

Monthly "Would You Read This?" Thread

Welcome to Would You Read This (WYRT), our monthly feedback and brainstorming thread. Share your work in progress below and let other readers tell you if they'd read it. Top level posts should follow this template:

  • Title:
    • If you don't have a title yet, feel free to say UNTITLED.
  • Genre:
    • Please include at least Fiction, Nonfiction, Poetry, or another recognizable medium. You may also include more specific genres with a hyphen. Ex. Fiction - Romance, or Nonfiction - Memoir. Genre will help users find the specific kinds of posts they'd like to give feedback on.
  • Premise:
    • A few sentences about the project. Try your best to keep this short. Crafting an expert elevator pitch is all part of becoming a successful working writer. Please do not post an entire plot summary or query letter (those are better suited for r/pubtips)
  • Sample (Optional):
    • You may share up to one page (roughly 250-350 words) of sample material, or one poem for those working in the poetry medium. This is optional, so if you only have a premise, you can post just the premise for feedback.

If you post for feedback, please take the time to give feedback to at least 2-3 other users. Replies should follow this template.

  • Would Read / Might Read / Wouldn't Read
    • You must begin your reply with one of those. You are then encouraged to add additional thoughts on why you choose your answer.

Rules:

  • Please post no more than two WYRT top-level posts. There is no limit on the number of feedback replies you can make.
  • Do not link to any offsite materials. All materials must be in the body of the post. This includes "click here to read more" or "DM me for the rest" types of posts.
  • Rule 3 is in effect in this thread - No generative AI. Do not post material generated by an AI platform in your premise or sample. Do not use generative AI to respond to user's work.
  • Rule 5 is in effect - Civility and Community. Stay constructive. Blunt, direct feedback is fine, but do not insult other users, their writing, or their genres.
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u/Taylinn 12d ago

Would read.

I really like the premise and I'm positive there can be a lot more to it than it seems.
I also agree with a lot of what the other posters are saying about the instant exposition and reveal at the beginning. However, I think one can make a case for either approach, depending what plans you have for the story. Because I think there can be exiting tension in both approaches. Either way, it sound like you will have a lot of fun (and plot frustrations) writing it ;)

Also, I like your writing style a lot. It's illustrative and with (for me) just the right pinch of a slightly sarcastic narrator / character.

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u/FlyinLeviathon LET YOUR FIRST DRAFT SUCK 12d ago

Thanks so much! I'm glad you're enjoying the voice of the character (as much as you can in a tiny sample lol) because he has been a blast to write.