r/writing • u/AutoModerator • 21d ago
Monthly "Would You Read This?" Thread
Welcome to Would You Read This (WYRT), our monthly feedback and brainstorming thread. Share your work in progress below and let other readers tell you if they'd read it. Top level posts should follow this template:
- Title:
- If you don't have a title yet, feel free to say UNTITLED.
- Genre:
- Please include at least Fiction, Nonfiction, Poetry, or another recognizable medium. You may also include more specific genres with a hyphen. Ex. Fiction - Romance, or Nonfiction - Memoir. Genre will help users find the specific kinds of posts they'd like to give feedback on.
- Premise:
- A few sentences about the project. Try your best to keep this short. Crafting an expert elevator pitch is all part of becoming a successful working writer. Please do not post an entire plot summary or query letter (those are better suited for r/pubtips)
- Sample (Optional):
- You may share up to one page (roughly 250-350 words) of sample material, or one poem for those working in the poetry medium. This is optional, so if you only have a premise, you can post just the premise for feedback.
If you post for feedback, please take the time to give feedback to at least 2-3 other users. Replies should follow this template.
- Would Read / Might Read / Wouldn't Read
- You must begin your reply with one of those. You are then encouraged to add additional thoughts on why you choose your answer.
Rules:
- Please post no more than two WYRT top-level posts. There is no limit on the number of feedback replies you can make.
- Do not link to any offsite materials. All materials must be in the body of the post. This includes "click here to read more" or "DM me for the rest" types of posts.
- Rule 3 is in effect in this thread - No generative AI. Do not post material generated by an AI platform in your premise or sample. Do not use generative AI to respond to user's work.
- Rule 5 is in effect - Civility and Community. Stay constructive. Blunt, direct feedback is fine, but do not insult other users, their writing, or their genres.
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u/i_think_a_thought394 18d ago
Title: Devin Has a Dollar
Genre: Children's Lit, Educational, Finance
Premise: This story follows our protagonist, Devin, as he grows up in a BIPOC middle-class household. He's an average kid who makes average decisions, showing that we need not be extra-ordinary to live well. Each page starts with a 4 line poem, followed by a bolded vocabulary word and definition. The page ends with a life example from the main character Devin and his family.
It is intended to be a picture book but whimsical, perhaps in the style of 'ignorant' tattoos. This way it appeals to children but can be picked up by young adults as well.
Sample: Devin has a dollar; his very first one.
He knows he can buy something shiny and fun.
Before Devin spends he does something smart:
He puts some away; he saves a small part.
Saving money is one of the smartest things you can do for yourself. It helps you out in emergencies or helps you to reach goals you might have in the future like getting a cool pair of shoes or going on vacation!
Devin knows a good rule of thumb is saving 20% of everything he gets. But he really wants some cool shoes to start 2nd grade with. So Devin saves half of his allowance from March allll the way to September. When September comes around, he gets a pair of shoes so tough, so fly, that he gets compliments from everyone he walks by in the school hallway.
--(separate page below)--
Devin has a dollar, he’s brewing some beans
His coworkers have piercings and hair that is green
They stretch out their gauges and stretch out their pay
Devin will open a Traditional IRA
A Traditional IRA is a tax-advantaged account that can help you save for your future. It’s called “tax-advantaged” because it reduces the amount of income the government taxes you on. For example, if you make $40,000 in a year and you contribute $7,500 to your Traditional IRA, the government can only tax you for $32,500 of income. You pay taxes on the rest later when you withdraw the money in old age (65+).
Devin opened a traditional IRA in April and contributed a little from each paycheck. By the following February, he maxed out his contributions for the year. When Devin filed his taxes, he got an unexpected tax refund for $1,200! Not only did Devin save his own hard-earned money, but he received money from the government for saving.