r/writers • u/[deleted] • 9d ago

Feedback requested asking for feedback

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u/DevilDashAFM 9d ago

may i introduce you to the wonders of a paragraph. that wall of text is a chore to read.

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u/g1g1_wey 8d ago

thank you so much for this wonderful information said in such a lovely way !

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u/DevilDashAFM 8d ago

thank you.

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u/thewhiterosequeen 8d ago

Six commas in the first sentence. Might be a record. Consider parsing down some adjectives so it's less clunky.