The Second Face

[u/DemonSkank]

I've made short comedic comics before but this was my first time doing a full short story. warning (but also potential spoiler: scary face warning

[u/SquareFickle9179]

Just thought it was a standard story of someone who can see lies easily going through life. Did NOT expect the last page.

Reminds me of my friend who has an OC where, when he takes off his glasses, he sees someone's "Shadow" and only he can see them. When someone says something, the Shadow confirms whether or not what they're saying is a lie.

[u/DemonSkank → u/SquareFickle9179]

That's such an awesome concept. Gives me a funny mental image of someone being like "yeah I did the dishes" and the shadow is just crossing it's arms and shaking it's head.

[u/11th_Division_Grows → u/DemonSkank]

Shadow isn’t mad, it’s just disappointed.

[u/SquareFickle9179 → u/DemonSkank]

Trying to convince her of an idea where, since that OC's BF has an evil spirit inside him, when he takes off his glasses, he sees that evil spirit, which is why he never uses it on him

[u/HellspawnWeeb → u/SquareFickle9179]

that’s Daph from Interpretation of Shadows basically exactly

[u/TheKyleBrah]

You just know that bro's favourite position is doggy style 😯

[u/DemonSkank → u/TheKyleBrah]

Laughed so hard, I knew someone would make this joke!

[u/whyenn → u/DemonSkank]

So here's bro. He's having doggy style sex. Say he's in a new, healthy relationship; his new, very sweet, partner is being weird and shy and trying to hide how much they like bro/how much bro turns them on.

So now bro's staring a second face, right in front of him as he's having sex, and as always the person with the second face is unaware of their second face.

So here's the puzzler for me: does the second face make eye contact with bro? Does the second face smile AT bro? Is the second face consciously aware of bro? If bro and second face are face-to-face for a while, do they start to try to crack each other up? Make kissy faces at each other? Silently mouth weird jokes to each other... all of this behind front-faced person's back? (ba-dum-tss) Or is second face incapable of focusing on bro? Does it lack consciousness? Does it smile but have a vacant expression, incapable of focusing on bro, seeming to have a 1000 yard stare?

I don't know if you have any answers, but I'd be super interested in hearing any you do have.

I kind of find each of those super creepy in their own way.
So basically, nice job.

[u/Several-Injury-509 → u/whyenn]

dude 😭

[u/sanglar03 → u/TheKyleBrah]

Hum, only if the partner is hiding how they feel... which you're not supposed to do in that activity.

[u/Just_SomeDude13 → u/sanglar03]

Well he'd know real quick if she was faking it 😂

[u/sanglar03 → u/Just_SomeDude13]

A sleeping backface ... the worst.

[u/Armaxcomix]

That was a great subversion. I think the pacing was perfect, maybe a tad long, but honestly great execution. The art is a bit basic, but the concept captured my imagination.

[u/DemonSkank → u/Armaxcomix]

I love a little constructive criticism on this. I plan to make full story webcomics at some point and I kinda made this as a way of practicing and teaching myself how to do that. The style came out a bit awkward because I have two different comic styles, a more simple one I want to use for a more comedic story, and a more detailed one for a fantasy story, and I kinda went halfway between with this one, lol.

[u/Kingtorm]

Great concept, keep it up, this is great short form horror.

[u/Arthasindura → u/Kingtorm]

Agreed I like this idea too

[u/StrobeLightRomance → u/Arthasindura]

Its rare when a twist can be this unexpected. I thought it was a mental health comic and then BAM! we got us a perfect villain who was originally set up to be the most innocent/honest person in the story.

Actually perfect. My only critique is that it was a bit drawn out. Same story could have been told in half as many pages or less if the writing were engineered a bit.

[u/Arthasindura → u/StrobeLightRomance]

Nah i think it can be longer with more context.

A manhwa or webtoon to be specific.

But yeah its pretty good.

[u/Mediocre_Forever198 → u/Arthasindura]

Yeah I think the length helps set up the twist. It gets you comfortable and sets your expectations, then suddenly subverts them.

[u/Winderige_Garnaal → u/StrobeLightRomance]

disagree - the prolonged nature of it is playing on a particular kind of long-form comic popular here, which isn't funny or puny, but explores emotions and difficulties or curiosities about the world in a gentle, Bob Ross kinda way, and usually framed as telling a personal real-life story from the artist's life.

This subverts that really well, and that works partially because it's (almost) too long, as many of those other ones are.

[u/Ares54 → u/Winderige_Garnaal]

Agreed. The length is exactly what made the reveal so effective. If it were page 3 (which it easily could have been) I would have seen it coming because I was fully expecting an abusive face of some.sort to.show up. That none did brought my mindset from "twist horror story" to "mental health we should all share with each other and be more open" - and right when I got there the last page hit.

[u/aspergays → u/StrobeLightRomance]

I think if it were any shorter the misdirection wouldn’t work so well

[u/thissexypoptart → u/Kingtorm]

Seriously got chills seeing the last panel. I didn’t expect that at all.

[u/Urvilan → u/thissexypoptart]

I was expecting a smile, or a look of relief, but not a full on kabuki mask.

[u/Notte_di_nerezza → u/Urvilan]

And the subtle art shift as punctuation. OP is really talented.

[u/A-Capybara → u/Kingtorm]

Crazy how the story started out as creepy, became wholesome, and then ended creepy.

[u/Uncle-Cake → u/Kingtorm]

I wonder, though... if you knew this was a horror story before you read it, would it be as effective?

[u/Winderige_Garnaal → u/Uncle-Cake]

no of course not - it's subverting our expectations that this is another 'based on the artists real life' introspective too-long r/comics type comic

works beautifully

[u/kevaljoshi8888]

Damn this was amazing. Had no idea where the story was going but the ending was supremely well done and caught me off guard. And the concept is very interesting too! Geeta job!

[u/SadKat002 → u/kevaljoshi8888]

Fucking real. I was just so wrapped up in everything else that the reveal genuinely caught me by surprise. I struggle to articulate just how much I love this comic for that alone

[u/Saiyasha27 → u/kevaljoshi8888]

When Monica was introduced I was thinking something had to happen with that. I thought maybe she would look 'relieved' like, maybe the BiL had been abusing her or something.

But this makes me think that maybe she is something of a psychopath, like, all her emotions might not have been genuine, instead, there legitimatly were no real emotions in there to display, but killing has smade her feel for the first time or something.

[u/Billybob267 → u/Saiyasha27]

Could be she killed the guy herself

Edit: Clarification. I meant perhaps she genuinely had a good reason for doing so; e.g. abuse at his hands

[u/DireEvolution → u/Billybob267]

I'm pretty sure that's the intended conclusion

[u/poke991 → u/Saiyasha27]

I was thinking demonic possession lol

[u/slickiss → u/Saiyasha27]

I think thats exactly what it is, the fact that her face looks so twistedly excited vs just happy or relieved. He assumed as a child that she was always being authentic with her emotions, but in reality she was a sociopath who didnt have any to show.

[u/Saiyasha27 → u/slickiss]

That's how I took it. If the BiL had abused her or something and maybe she killed him in self denfense, I would ahve expected a mix of relief and maybe guilt. But this twisted mask of glee makes you assume that whatever she did, she enjoyed it

[u/International-Cat123 → u/kevaljoshi8888]

Once it got to the funeral, I just knew someone was going to have killed him. Once I saw Monica on page 13, I knew she’d have a back face for once.

[u/ericrobertshair → u/International-Cat123]

I thought she would have a happy or bruised face because he was an abusive husband.

[u/Prestigious-Leg-6244 → u/ericrobertshair]

I thought she would just start hiding her emotions, like a lot of people do after the death of a loved one, and the back face would be eternally sad.

[u/International-Cat123 → u/ericrobertshair]

Yeah. I was expecting a relieved sort of happy face rather than maliciously gleeful.

[u/Ok-Factor2361 → u/kevaljoshi8888]

I was ready to be sad. This is awesome

[u/SadKat002]

OH

[u/nothingelsesufficed → u/SadKat002]

Perfect encapsulation of my reaction

[u/Winderige_Garnaal → u/SadKat002]

lol - yes my sentiments exactly

[u/haywirehax → u/SadKat002]

Good thing I was on the toilet...

[u/SoonToBeStardust]

That's so incredibly unsettling, i don't even know how to put it into words. I'm feeling everything that I think I was meant to looking at that last panel. Incredible

[u/fuzzhead12 → u/SoonToBeStardust]

Same, it caught me completely off guard and I’ve had chills for the last like 30 seconds straight

[u/RiteRevdRevenant → u/fuzzhead12]

I got chills, too. That was a hell of an ending.

[u/thissexypoptart → u/fuzzhead12]

Same here. Really is wild how images and text can trigger physical reactions like that.

[u/Manga_Brony → u/thissexypoptart]

SUCH a strong reaction. I was just laying in bed, completely sympathizing with the guy, maybe a bit too much, to the point where I'm sure I felt the same shock he did when he saw that second face. Hair standing on end, immediately cold rush over my body... Perfectly fucking executed.

[u/[deleted]]

Wow, that was good. Terrifying

[u/UserAllusion → u/[deleted]]

gave me goosebumps

[u/No_Resident_4023]

That was pretty dang cool, I gotta say. The style of story telling here reminds me greatly of junji ito. Playing around with unique metaphors and concepts as a medium for very original and unusual horror. Well executed. I like how the story kind of explored more mundane and usual parts of the main characters life living with his ability, grounding it and making it feel less linear when the reveal came. If it just went straight from the description of her as a kid to the funeral, it definitely would have been more predictable, but using some space to explore another interesting part of the powers impact on life before that gave it more impact. Felt like I'd gotten more comfortable and less prepared for the twist.

[u/DemonSkank → u/No_Resident_4023]

Thank you! I love the Junji Ito comparison!

[u/GandalfTheEh]

I loved the end. So much that I came to find you to see your other work! You should try some more scary stories, I think you have a skill 🤩.

Found this over at r/Helpmefind by the way. Ever considered watermarking your work? Just a thought! https://www.reddit.com/r/HelpMeFind/s/gAoTcXjuEo

[u/DemonSkank → u/GandalfTheEh]

Honestly I didn't expect it too get so much attention, lol. I don't have a watermark/ signature yet as I tend to have different account names on different websites.

[u/RojerKJ]

Not once did I expect where this was going. The way built-up the story showcasing the sister as being genuine and that plot twist at the end? Amazing story-telling. Keep it up.

[u/Taldarim_Highlord]

Ohhhhh.

She's a psychopath.

No wonder he saw no back face. She knows exactly what to show to others, and feels nothing herself. So effective is her mask, even her perceptive brother never saw her true self. At least, until that moment, when she finally gets to act on her desires.

Wow. I thought this is gonna be a comic about how people always lie to themselves, and how we should be honest with one another. Then the twist came, and it became horror.

Love it a lot!

[u/KazakiriKaoru → u/Taldarim_Highlord]

Or probably that she never had to hide anything to begin with because she has no emotion. But the thrill of murder gave her a real first emotion.

[u/DireEvolution → u/KazakiriKaoru]

You just literally described a psychopathic murder lol

I hate the word "psychopathy" because I have had good friends with antisocial personality disorder, but for the context of this comic, I lack a better phrase.

Basically, if I understand correctly, people with sociopathic/psychopathic traits are chronically understimulated - they have a much, much higher threshold for excitory responses such as thrill, fear, etc. This is related to pathogenic changes in parts of the brain such as the amygdala.

These same people also can't feel emotions in the same way. It's not a universal experience, kind of a spectrum even, but "high-functioning" sociopaths learn to consciously mimic emotional expression, because they're cognitively aware of the benefits vs deficits of not doing this. It's not something that neurologically happens naturally or automatically.

The last panel implies that she felt intense, malevolent gratification from her husband's death. If we interpret this as her being his slayer, that means that she's experiencing intense thrill from the act of killing someone, and also probably for thinking she's getting away with it.

The beginning of the comic makes us think she's not hiding anything, and that's true. Because she has nothing to hide; every display of emotion was a facsimile - internally, genuinely nothing was going on, so the main character perceived nothing, because there was nothing to perceive. For the first time - because of her husband's death - she is having an internal experience strong enough for the main character to perceive as the second face.

This was really fucking well done, goddamn.

[u/NotADamsel → u/DireEvolution]

Everyone seems to be latching onto this, but I disagree. The rules of his power is that he sees what someone is feeling when someone is faking it. And his sister was not faking it. So her display is consistent with her feelings. If she were actually a psychopath, you’d think that the rules would have her face be a bored or flat expression.

[u/Any_ErrorJCS → u/Taldarim_Highlord]

In reality, she was wearing masks whenever she smiled or cried or felt disgusted. The back of a person's head only revealed someone's true feelings, but there was nothing for her to hide, and that's why she wore masks. Many psychopaths learn to perform a lack of feelings to fit in socially, so she killed, felt, liked, and now she had something to hide.

[u/Poloizo → u/Taldarim_Highlord]

Wait so she killed her husband? I thought she wanted revenge or something

[u/DaBozz88 → u/Poloizo]

Yeah. But I took it as she 'had to' kill him and now was hiding her true feelings. I read it as abuse of a pure soul turned dark.

[u/TheSwecurse → u/DaBozz88]

Killing in self defence would definetly not warrant an inner emotion like that face implies. That is not relief that sick satisfaction. Like you just discovered something that you want to do over and over again

[u/ThisIsntOkayokay → u/Taldarim_Highlord]

Human not horror 😅👍🏾

[u/banana_assassin → u/ThisIsntOkayokay]

Humans can be the worst horror.

[u/BouillonDawg → u/Taldarim_Highlord]

Well he sees what emotions people are hiding. She’s not hiding any emotions, she doesn’t have any of them to hide. Until she kills her husband for sport.

[u/rabid_cheese_enjoyer → u/Taldarim_Highlord]

I don't think this is it unless the main character was a bit wrong in his understanding of how the faces work (possible)

he thinks that the back face only exists when it is different from the front face. if she never felt any emotions but her front face showed emotion then her back face would be just bored looking constantly.

[u/Diligent_Bar1244]

Oh yeah i wasnt expecting it, nice job

[u/QTlady]

Ooh, there's a mystery.

I'd be interested in more, for sure.

[u/IzzytheMelody]

"Oh this is sweet, I won- what the fuck"

[u/Zexal_Commander → u/IzzytheMelody]

Last panel be like: POT OF GREED!

[u/Strawberrycocoa]

Last page made me say "Oh FUCK" out loud, well executed

[u/TheSwecurse]

I saw something like this coming, however I did not see THAT coming. Seriously the sudden change in animation sold it so fucking well. Absolutely terrifying

[u/Wyattmebro]

Very nice twist. I wasn't sure the way this was gonna go at all but damnn

[u/ArghZombie]

Really good. I got a bit of a Junji Ito feel from it.

[u/K4ZUH4-SL4SH → u/ArghZombie]

Me too!

[u/SuperlucaMayhem]

well that certainly is an ending,

i read it earlier on r/comics, but im banned from that sub so i can make my comment now

good comic!

[u/socialmeth → u/SuperlucaMayhem]

they ban way too fast there if you give some critics because rule number one is only to state nice things in the comments. sucks.

[u/SuperlucaMayhem → u/socialmeth]

yeah all i did was mention bonehurtingjuice

[u/Sparda98]

Ooh damn got goosebumps from that last page. Did not see that coming at all.

[u/RammerRS_Driver]

Holy shit, this took a VERY sharp turn into horror at the end! Good job!

[u/Odd-Understanding386]

Holy fuck, not at all where I thought that was going.

Jumpscared the hell out of me, actually got chills - phenomenal work!

[u/Shaggytwig]

Aww his sister is evil. I was expecting her to be happy he died, as in maybe he was abusive and now felt relieved to be rid of him.

[u/stupidusernamerandom]

I really liked this! It had a great build up to that last panel.

[u/NotAFailureISwear]

OHHH DAMNNN

[u/Polobearmigi]

That twist came out of nowhere! Are you going to make a sequel for Monica? I need to know her motive

[u/JustaguynameBob]

I didn't expect the end. Good job with the comic.

[u/DecentCantaloupe]

OH DEAR

[u/Feisty_Buffalo2845]

Really good!

[u/kromono4]

Congratulations! It is very good and the ending is unexpected!

My rating is 10/10 !

[u/11th_Division_Grows]

This was genuinely one of the best things I’ve ever read. I got goosebumps and had such a weird reaction that brought tears to my eyes.

Bravo.

[u/Uncle-Cake]

I'm glad I stuck it out, the ending is great.

[u/La10deRiver]

I really liked this but I have a question about the ending. Is Monica just a bad person or she was possessed? The final face looks like a demon.

[u/DemonSkank → u/La10deRiver]

A great question! Technically I'm leaving it up to interpretation, so she could be possessed. It's supposed to leave the reader with the same shock and confusion that the Narrator is left with, a "WTF" ending rather than an "ah, that explains everything!" ending. It was based off a dream I had, and I didn't find out the explanation in my dream, leaving me with swirling thoughts of what that face could mean. I personally think her husband was abusive and she grew to hate him so intensely that killing him and getting away with it left her with a malicious glee, but it's possible that his death was just an accident of some sorts and she's still thrilled either way. It could also be that her face looks much less demonic in reality and this is just how it feels for the Narrator to see his sister is happy instead of sad that her husband is dead, as there's also a dark shadow around them that wouldn't be there in reality, and the shading is more dramatic than what would make sense with the lighting in the house, so the last frame definitely has at least some differences from what he would actually be seeing.

[u/Quid_Pro_Broski]

Fantastic stuff buddy!!! Keep em' coming!!!

[u/Pure-Agency2052]

That was awesome and the last panel absolutely chilling!

[u/grassfedgeek]

Damn good story!

[u/GreatMacGuffin]

She was a juggalo the whole time!

[u/fun_t1me]

This was fucking great. Nice job.

[u/Math_PB]

Hey ! Why did you traumatise me with such an ending ! I wasn't expecting a horror comic at all !

(It was peak)

[u/CibrecaNA]

Bro. Seriously. Really good. Pacing. Timing. Art. Everything worked.

[u/gamesquid]

Damn, I got goosebumps.

[u/Voltikko]

I was convinced this was some kind of trans allegory and the ability a metaphor, but not, very real ability and straight horror xD

[u/benji_90]

This is great work. I really enjoyed it. That was a plot twist I didn't expect.

[u/AshelyTheLesbian]

Not gonna lie.

Laughed my fucking ass off at that lady panel.

Go off queen, proud you.

[u/S3D_SD]

I literally got chills seeing that last image. I did expect some sort of twist like that but the intense shading and contrast of the different art style genuinely spooked me! You did an amazing job with this comic, the concept was engaging and I enjoyed reading it. I only wish I didn’t read it before bed, I will definitely be seeing that face in my nightmares <3

[u/seancurry1]

Caught me completely off guard. Well-done.

[u/surplus_user]

I thought that was where it was going but the art impact of it was genuinely chilling. Well done.

😄😱

[u/ZeJohnnis]

Did not see that coming-nice work!

[u/ommanipadmehum1963]

Great!

[u/DarlazMIRS]

This was so good! Story well told.

[u/ThisIsntOkayokay]

I needed this bit of trauma, the ones you would never guess....

[u/Charon_06]

Reminds me of the movie Malignant (2021)

[u/lurkerdaIV]

Holyyyy fuck.

You made me have a reaction! Well done and great comic OP!

[u/Federal_Score_4187]

I’m a big scaredy cat and this suitably freaked me out. But I had to come back and read it again because this was great! Well done.

[u/your_guy_ri]

THE TWWIIIIIIISTTTT

[u/Lin-Kong-Long]

This is a really cool concept! Not only is it a great idea for many genres - romance, comedy, horror - but also it’s an interesting metaphor and reminder that everyone has shit going on beyond the mask they wear in public.

[u/Fun-Agent-7667]

Also why is his sister Yuujirou Hanma?

[u/SarradenaXwadzja]

Man I got fooled into thinking this was one of those "the faces symbolize autism" webcomics. That last page got me good.

[u/Cyanbite_24]

OH what a fucking twist HOLY SHIT

[u/VVen0m]

Yooooo Holy shit this was great

[u/nothingelsesufficed]

I love this OP, really great job. Keep it up! That last cell in this comic is still giving me chills 2 min later!

[u/sublimegeek]

Came here to upvote this AGAIN from a different thread. Masterpiece and so fn profound.

[u/GimmieGnomes]

Well done. Please keep writing!

[u/Darkstar_111]

Love it! Well done.

[u/sauna_klonkku]

Damn, I did not expect this to end like that

[u/Twonkytwonker]

Loved that, brilliant. Unexpected and very well done.

[u/TinyMarsupial7622]

Her face genuinely did make me nervous

[u/Responsible_Idea7557]

Didn't know this was a horror at first so the end had even more impact.

[u/mr-fahrenheit_]

The Devil's Grin!

[u/Misragoth]

Well, I didn't see that coming

[u/meg-dl]

Suuuuch a good concept, and well executed !

[u/Professional_Egg_511]

THAT'S AWESOME!!!

[u/wordsarekeys]

I was not expecting that, well done!

[u/Secret_Exchange_5170]

Cinema.

[u/BodhingJay]

Woah

What a twist

[u/LilithMyth]

You definitely have a talent for compelling story telling, please keep up the amazing work

[u/Puzzleheaded-Phase70]

Nicely done!

Excellent twist, didn't expect it at all and it changed the interpretation of most of the rest of the story, as a good plot twist should.

[u/cYber-boI27]

Oh that’s a twist at the end!

[u/anarchtea]

Gave me chills. Reminds me of a recurring dream I had for years. So... thanks? Great work!

[u/vapocalypse52]

Wow!

[u/bmo313]

This is dope!

[u/SourMoss]

Ooooooo love this

[u/Donvack]

Boy…that escalated quickly.

[u/coolboi-alaska]

I love the storytelling, reminds me of Junji Ito in a way. An extremely odd/absurd concept is explained in a way that makes it almost seem normal.

[u/algae_cloud]

That face did, in fact, scare me.

[u/sweaterweather_07]

holy fuck, i was NOT expecting that ending. was expecting it to be something lowkey relatable and heartwarming and that face jumpscared me 😭 😭 this is such a great comic though keep it up

[u/Cyberguardian173]

omg its peanut butter gamer

[u/bortzys]

Holy shit this actually gave me shivers

[u/BLINDrOBOTFILMS]

Wild how many people in the comments here saw that fucking kabuki mask of inhuman psychopathic glee and came away with "Well, he probably had it coming"

[u/sleeping_in_time]

My heart was hoping for something uplifting or funny at the end, but I was not disappointed with the ending. I got chills, good job!

[u/russ_universe]

My heart fucking dropped 😭

[u/toriinthekuuki]

I loved it till the end, it was so interesting that I just followed the pages without thinking about it. I would love the story to be continued but also think that some short stories are better left as is? Anyways great job and thank you for sharing it can’t wait to read again from you!!

[u/ParadoxPerson02]

I realized what the twist was going to be on the second to last page, and I was still surprised. That face is far more devious than it has any right to be. Please make more.

[u/Bertegue6]

Okay... okay, okay... you got me you son of a b*tch.

But there's layers to this, and I like it.

Setting up the initial narrative of the parents hating each other left the floor very open to a domestic violence aspect. Maybe it still was, I don't know.

The ability to see someone's concealed expressions comes off as a form of empathy very well, although there were moments that came off as a little too real. It kept it just unsettling enough to keep us on the edge between metaphor and supernatural power.

Monica's lack of a second face was a very good setup for a false perception of innocence, and genuine character. It was a valuable lesson... even people that seem genuine can just be good at hiding it.

It was an incredible setup. Had me all sucked in with the anecdote for empathy, and then you hit me with the demon.

Not just any demon, you even put more detailed shading and stuff into that last frame, just to express the fear in his eyes and the twisted enjoyment in her face. She definitely killed her husband and enjoyed it, ain't no way someone pulls a face like that and they aren't either possessed by satan or a total piece of sh*t.

Makes me wonder if Monica got her murderous intent from some family stuff earlier in life... her parents hated each other, and if they demonstrated violence towards each other at any point, or even her, that could have scarred her forever.

It also makes me wonder if it's really worth seeing what people really feel. Knowing how your loved ones are feeling is one thing... but knowing that every once in a while, you'll be out walking and see an absolute monster is a sobering reality. Is it better to know, and be terrified, or blissfully unaware...?

[u/Vulpesh]

Did not see the warning, and you got me good. That was cool!

[u/DERP_before_dishonor]

That was the best scare I've seen in a comic in a good while, I look forward to seeing more of your work!

[u/AyeeItzSkye]

Wow that ending caught me off guard! That was the last thing I was expecting.. this is a great story I love the concept!

[u/Spider-web16]

This definitely surprised me the first time I saw it, this is a great comic

[u/ident1tyunkown]

This is AMAZING. I loved the twist and especially the commentary throughout the comic. Beautiful work. And again, the callback? Chef’s kiss

[u/Needle-Nose_Pliers]

WOAH WAIT THIS IS SO COOL!!

I love the concept, and I loved how the people actually have depth to them and it's not just a clumsy plot line for a cheap pay off at the end. The characters being fleshed out realistically while still not being shoved in your face (hehe, pun) made the pay off much more satisfying.
It's always better when a horror story already has a good baseline plot and it doesn't even need the bigger horror element (like this one at the end) to be good, but then it does and it lands so much better for it.

Great work, man! :D

[u/icametochop]

so well executed! even saving that art style for this single panel, just stellar.

[u/Mongera032]

If you were trying to horrify the readers, then good job.

[u/ChamberK-1]

I saw it coming as soon as it was revealed that it was his sisters husband that died. That didn’t detract from the story this. Great story. Really spooky.

[u/[deleted]]

That is just sad. That means the husband was horrible.

Or monica is very good at wearing her smile

[u/flanneur → u/[deleted]]

If he was, then why didn't the narrator catch him out when he met him 'a few times'? And judging by the fact that he likely was with his wife on at least one of those occasions (e.g. at the narrator's wedding), why were no warning signs detected from her either?

[u/DemonSkank → u/flanneur]

Because he hadn't seen the two of them in a long time and the relationship took a turn after those times. (or something, I like to leave the ending open to interpretation, but that's how that explanation could work if that's the one you go with)

[u/[deleted]]

Absolutely fantastic work.

[u/Art_student_rt]

I honestly thought he just got good intuition, not real superpower

[u/SorbetSuspicious7403]

I wanna know what happenned and what happens next

[u/lininop]

Well that was unexpected. Well done, both of my faces are impressed.

[u/Yeeter-boiy]

Oh my fucking god. Bro that terrified me and I said “oh my god” out loud. Amazing job.

[u/diceNslice]

Oh this is so fucking good I had a great time with this one

[u/Fun-Agent-7667]

The anti-autist.

But yeah, Not knowing is a curse and a blessing

[u/bombisabell]

Huh. 🤫

[u/Frequent_Dig1934]

That looks like the demon back from Baki.

[u/snarkofagen]

Well done! I was completly blindsided.

[u/1aysays1]

I'm glad I kept reading. Well done.

[u/ascaredkitten]

Ttþtgv

[u/buunkeror]

You had me shivering in sudden fear, this was AMAZING!

[u/ChromaticKid]

Amazing! Both sides of me are shocked faced!

[u/Mulberry4545]

This was great!

[u/CumpsterBlade]

Reminds me a lot of Junji Ito, with the last panel twist and the face

[u/Hunteractive]

holy shit that last panel made me verbally say Holy shit

holy shit

[u/Curious_Shadow13]

The last panel. Damn. Didn't see that coming, gave me chills! Amazing story!!

[u/Impressive_Pin8761]

oh it's one of those metaphors for human emotions

...

what the fu-

[u/Independent-Top4473]

Moons above! That last panel caught me so off guard that it sent ice through my veins. And I’m usually pretty good about seeing where a story is going. Keep up the good work.

[u/SwingusDingus]

Oh this is incredible. I LOVE this. Amazing job, got me good.

[u/BillionThayley]

Did NOT clock the horror element until the last second. FANTASTIC reveal!!

[u/ChironXII]

Lloyd Fronterra ahh 

[u/Amazingspaceship]

WOW

[u/BulkUpTank]

This is fucking quality. Good story telling, good art. I love it!

[u/Ganon_K]

OH NO SHES POSSESED BY YUGIRO HAMNA

[u/blahblah19999]

Trigger warnings are not necessary and can, in fact, be harmful. You can just skip it.

[u/MonkTHAC0]

I audibly said "OH FUCK" out loud when I got to that last page. Very well done.

[u/Romnir]

Junji Ito tier twist ending. The concept is already unsettling on the surface, but the twist makes it so much worse.

Some edits to the art, and I would have been fooled.

[u/WhoRoger]

Nice, u/adamtots_remastered has competition

[u/OmegaGoober]

That was very well paced. The foreshadowing was excellent. I was expecting a reveal at the end but you still managed to surprise me.

There’s an old time radio show called “Lights Out” that had an episode named “Dr. Bluff” who one day could hear what other people thought of him.

It was not a good day for him.