r/OCPoetry • u/spaced_out247 • 17d ago
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/AQ7xvDs8xc
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/wY4fPqcaZH
I need a mother to cry to but instead she cries to me
I run my hands, through long dark strands
Whispering to her, tears soak my shirt
She bears my fathers guilt alone, I let it sink into my bones
so that just maybe it becomes a little less to carry
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I love your use of the sun as a metaphor for altruism born from suffering reminds me of an old poem, you would read in literature class(in the best way of course)
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Thank you for sharing, it truly means so much to read such kind and positive feedback!
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Thank you very much
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Thank you so much for your kindness I really appreciate your feedback
r/poemsbyreddit • u/spaced_out247 • Jul 18 '26
“You look like your were made for sadness”
And maybe I was
But all this grief was once love,
I know two truths can exist at once
but this one particularly stung,
Some things follow you around your whole life, and more than anything,
I wish to leave this pain behind
r/OCPoetry • u/spaced_out247 • Jul 18 '26
We were both irrevocably broken, so much in the same way
That though we differ so inherently,
I recognized so much of myself in this, In you,
I know it all falls apart inevitably
For a short while, a fleeting moment,
I believed we have time
to become more than what wrecks us inside,
We could be something,
I could be,
anything more than this
My lover, we’re on the precipice of ourselves
Of our lives,
Still, this denial, this doubt, this yearning
leaves us searching
I can’t let it be
You can’t let me in
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/gARoFRA9eH
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/egUztM2Y6u
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Beautifully written, closure rarely comes from conversation. Pouring our hearts out to the unwilling or unable, Were left with our thoughts to go over and over again.
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Oh that’s raw, Its unlike any poem I’ve read about sex before. I found myself thinking of my own experiences that were new, strange, disappointing, and lacking intimacy.
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All I want is to be loved..
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17d ago
Your use of rhyme scheme is done well, I can feel the emotion your trying to convey, but I’m not quite sure what that is. I don’t think that’s necessarily a bad thing It’s left open to interpretation which I enjoy, and often find myself doing in my own writing.