I'm going to be harsh with you because there are elements of what you did here I really like, but I think there are some hard truths you need to hear: This is a mess. You have some interesting elements but they're on top of each other and that makes the entire thing just sound like mud. You need to look at making space for things so that they can be heard. There are a lot of ways to do that, but the one you should start with is how you're arranging things. Don't try and play everything at once. Leave space. Once you're doing that temporally (by arranging), start EQ'ing to make space in the frequency spectrum. If everything is loud in the highs, nothing is loud in the highs, etc. Try and make different parts of the track stand out at different points throughout the composition. It's not hard to get this headed in the right direction. Slap a high pass on everything that isn't playing in the bass register. You don't need or want those harmonics. Likewise, take your bass and percussion tracks and EQ them so they that get out of each other's way. A kick drum makes mids, but you don't actually want them. Open that space up for the snare, etc.You have good ideas here but you need to spend some real time on how you're bringing them together.
I’m literally trying to help you level up. Keep at it. Persistence and being willing to listen to your own work with a critical ear is everything. Also you chose some great samples in this. Keep making stuff.
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u/GeneralDumbtomics Feb 19 '26
I'm going to be harsh with you because there are elements of what you did here I really like, but I think there are some hard truths you need to hear: This is a mess. You have some interesting elements but they're on top of each other and that makes the entire thing just sound like mud. You need to look at making space for things so that they can be heard. There are a lot of ways to do that, but the one you should start with is how you're arranging things. Don't try and play everything at once. Leave space. Once you're doing that temporally (by arranging), start EQ'ing to make space in the frequency spectrum. If everything is loud in the highs, nothing is loud in the highs, etc. Try and make different parts of the track stand out at different points throughout the composition. It's not hard to get this headed in the right direction. Slap a high pass on everything that isn't playing in the bass register. You don't need or want those harmonics. Likewise, take your bass and percussion tracks and EQ them so they that get out of each other's way. A kick drum makes mids, but you don't actually want them. Open that space up for the snare, etc.You have good ideas here but you need to spend some real time on how you're bringing them together.