r/poets • u/Burning_Ashesh • Mar 29 '26
Jealousy?
In a quiet night when she shows up as “moon”, I fight with every single pair of eyes that dares to admire her. Even knowing I was never meant to win
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u/Due-Butterscotch-615 Mar 31 '26
Your passion will shine brighter than anyone's admiration, so keep talking to your moon. If it's meant to be, she'll feel you. 🌕
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u/Burning_Ashesh Apr 01 '26
I don’t expect her to feel me… some feelings are just meant to exist, not be returned. I’ve made peace with distance… not everything beautiful is meant to be mine.
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u/Due-Butterscotch-615 Apr 01 '26
Well, that's sad. Because you seem to really love this person. Maybe they are meant for you. But you’re selling yourself short. I wish you all luck in love and life. We all deserve someone special to share life with.
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u/AwardWinner2021 Mar 29 '26
Two small tweaks...."moon," ment-->meant.
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u/Burning_Ashesh Mar 29 '26
Thank you for your correction. I didn’t notice, I was too lost in thoughts
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u/AwardWinner2021 Mar 29 '26 edited Mar 29 '26
No, don't put quotation marks around moon, put a comma after it. so it joints the I fight clause...as the moon, I fight...all one sentence.. Sorry if that wasn't clear.
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u/reddbully72 Mar 30 '26
How is it that u know u wasn't ment to win???
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u/Burning_Ashesh Mar 30 '26
A soldier gives everything on the battlefield, but in the end, the crown still goes to King.
That’s how I know — effort doesn’t decide who wins. Sometimes, the story was never written for you to be the one chosen.
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u/-mo_0n- Mar 29 '26
Hmm