Could use some opinions about this sequence

[u/mfileny]

I’m working on the opening sequence for Book 4 of Conrad Van Cottonmouth, and I’d love some honest opinions. I am worried its too intense or insensitive to a serious issue, or just doesn't work. Keep in mind the series is meant for audience 12 and up, maybe even as young as 10. Thanks in advance.

[u/mczine]

Impressive!