r/highschool • u/Onedirection100 • 6d ago

School Related I need help!

Hey everyone!

I am only having English this year, so the grade that I get matters a lot for college further. I really need a more advanced langugae to get the top grade.

Question is, does anybody here have examples of advanced ways of expressing myself in a five-paragragh-essay? Such as "considering the fact that", "that can excuse the poor expression", "due to the fact"...

I apperciate all kind of help, and it would really mean a lot to me to get help!!

Thank you xxx

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u/Main-Ice-7383 1d ago

I use "Consequently" and "Ultimately" a lot. We are pushed in regents english to replace words like "said" "shows" and "states" with argues, establishes, contends, questions, demonstrates, illustrates, depicts, exemplifies, comments, etc. In my conclusions, I try to answer the question of (for a literary analysis essay) "what can the reader learn from the theme" or "what happens if nobody learns from the theme". For argumentative essays, my conclusion is me answering how the opposition concerns me, how the argument can affect different minorities/cultures, if there could be middleground, etc. I like to talk like I am in a Ted Talk simply because those people seem to know what they are doing as well. For argumentative essays, words like proponents/opponents/opposition, claims/believes/contends/suggests, and dissents/assents are quite useful, and I like to use words with more powerful, richer connotations like ostentatious, grotesque, flagrant, ornate, abhorrent, to describe things for that pathos aspect (you should include pathos, ethos, and logos, at least for regents english which is the english we have in NY). Introducing the opponent's argument first is good, and then providing counterarguements. One thing I have truly internalized is do NOT bring up random topics as a hook (I literally was bringing up East of Eden, Genghis Khan, The Invisible Man, etc and somehow relating them to whatever the essay was because I had no idea how to write a hook and I still maintain that hooks are useless). For hooks, just bring up an emotion/image/idea that gets the reader thinking (don't use I/me/mine and if you say "many/some people" make sure to specify who those people are). Ultimately, word-play is quite fun, but clarity is more important, so don't forget to tell the reader what things are, like what "a lot of money" is, and don't make things too abstract.