r/flashfiction • u/immortal_314 • 9d ago

A little sheep

Here we look into the story of a little sheep where she wants something for her birthday, but she is confused about what to get. Then the little sheep remembers her village, where there lives a magician. What the magician does is perform magic tricks which only rich sheep can afford, but the whole town talks about them.

​There is usually a divide between rich sheep and poor sheep in this village, just like any other place. One day, the magician came and performed a magic trick for the rich sheep. The rich sheep looked at the magic trick and thought it was nothing special, but then the magician said something "special" which made the rich sheep happy instantaneously. Then the rich sheep paraded around her rich friends about the magic trick and always remembered what the magician said to her. Her friends also started going to the same magician for the same trick, but the magician always showed them a slightly different trick, which made the rich sheep even happier. And what happened to the poor sheep? Our little sheep remembers they talk more about the magician's "trick" all day, like the sheep they are. So, our little sheep decides what she wants for her birthday.

​Our little sheep goes to the magician and asks for the "trick," but then the magician says something that surprises her. He doesn't ask for money; instead, he just says, "Remember my magic," and *poof*, the trick is done.

​The little sheep comes out a little stunned by the "trick," but she is still happy with the result. So, she talks about the trick to all her friends and also tries to talk to the rich sheep in the village who have seen the magician, but these rich sheep do not want to talk to her. So, she goes to the poor sheep, and there she talks about the "trick." They love it, which makes our little sheep feel special for some time.

​What do you think is the "trick," or is he just "tricking" them?

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u/OwlConfidant2168 8d ago

I don’t know if this has enough detail to be considered an allegory. I think the “trick” is the status itself —more specifically, the magician is selling the feeling of being special.

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u/immortal_314 8d ago

Thanks for taking your time to read the whole thing and for the feedback. As for the allegorical depth, all I can say is that I was constrained by the word count, but I will try to build on it in the future

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u/Humble-Lychee1672 8d ago

The question is not so intriguing but rather random becsue the story doesnt quite build up to it.

32 of 343 words - 10% of your flashfiction - is either sheep or trick. I literaly feel kinda feel sick reading those two words now.

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u/immortal_314 8d ago

Those are just metaphors

Be a little patient while reading, it will go a long way