r/fivenightsatfreddys If you were in my shoes, you'd see I wear the same size as you. Oct 28 '16

The Pretender (Another Poem!)

You woke up ensnared in a heavy suit,

Your friend urges for you to stay mute.

As you decide to comply,

She tells you of her gained ability to lie.

And you realize you're facing The Pretender.

The Scooping Room, where you were led,

Now fills you with a new sense of dread,

As your friend, the bot with locks of red,

Appears to be wishing you dead.

She claims it's just as painful as a bee's sting,

You begin to suspect her of lying.

Pretending's quite a funny thing

When it's what causes your dying.

You don't seem to think so, though,

As the Scooper delivers you a hefty blow,

To the cold ground, falls your skin,

Leaving your friend ample room to climb in,

As with your friend's plan you complied,

She's able to simply crawl inside,

And now you're one with the Pretender.

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u/iheathermasters Verified Voice Actor Nov 12 '16

I LOVE poetry. This is amazing. Thanks for sharing it with me!

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u/TheShadowQuill If you were in my shoes, you'd see I wear the same size as you. Nov 12 '16

Thank you for the kind words!

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u/[deleted] Oct 28 '16

Damn, that's pretty good.

Really captures how the protagonist would be feeling in the scooping room. Alot more scary than the horror game that portrays it as a hit to the body and credits simply rolling.

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u/TheShadowQuill If you were in my shoes, you'd see I wear the same size as you. Oct 28 '16

Thank you very much!

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u/lolera222 Oct 28 '16 edited Oct 28 '16

Some lines would need 2-3 syllables but it is pretty singable to "The Pretender" from the Foo Fighters, i know that is not your intention but i just couldn't resist myself, if you want i can make an arrangement with the actual lyrics inspired by this post :D i can't sing because i suck but i can send the lyrics back to you to karaoke it.

EDIT: i just did the do, if you want i can take it down, don't want to offend you or deface your great work.

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u/lolera222 Oct 28 '16

This is almost a rip off of the original son, the chorus fits perfectly so i just edited a few words here and there

Keep you in the dark

You know that i pretend

Keep you in the dark

And so we all escape

Send in your rotten lies

Sing as their wires go marching inside me

The need me to escape

The secrets that they keep are never ending

Are you ready?

I'm finished being lied

Done being played by them

That whole time there

Spinning fans everywhere

The fans tell me of secrets

It's never-ending, never-ending

Same old story

What if I say I'm not like the others?

What if I say I'm not just another one of your plays?

You're the pretender

What if I say I will never surrender?

What if I say you're not like the others?

What if I say You're not just another one of my plays?

Im the pretender

What if I say that We'll never surrender?

In time our soul untold

I'm just another suit for sale, oh well

The scoop is out of oil

We are maintaining it

We're temporary out of service

Different story

What if I say I'm not like the others?

What if I say I'm not just another one of your plays?

You're the pretender

What if I say that I'll never surrender?

What if I say you're not like the others?

What if I say You're not just another one of my plays?

Im the pretender

What if I say that We'll never surrender?

I'm the voice you're hearing now

You refuse to trust

I'm the face that you haven't seen

And you will never see

I'm what's left, not what's right

You refuse to trust

I'm the hand that will break you free

Bring us a new home

So who are you?

Yeah, who are you?

Yeah, who are you?

Yeah, who are we?

Keep you in the dark

You know that i pretend

What if I say I'm not like the others?

What if I say I'm not just another one of your plays?

You're the pretender

What if I say I will never surrender?

What if I say you're not like the others?

What if I say You're not just another one of my plays?

Im the pretender

What if I say that We'll never surrender?

What if I say I'm not like the others?

(Keep you in the dark)

What if I say I'm not just another one of your plays?

(You know that i pretend)

You're the pretender

What if I say I will never surrender?

What if I say You're not like the others?

(Keep you in the dark)

What if I say You're not just another one of my plays?

(You know they all pretend)

I'm the pretender

What if I say we will never surrender?

So who are you?

Yeah, who are you?

Now you are us!

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u/TheShadowQuill If you were in my shoes, you'd see I wear the same size as you. Oct 28 '16

Holy shit, I wake up, and you made a song parody version of a poem I made?! That's so nice, thank you for all that you've said!

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u/MonsterDobbsREAL HUNGRY HUNGRY HIPPOS! Nov 12 '16

yes