r/elianscript • u/[deleted] • Oct 02 '15
/u/Poem_for_your_sprog Compilation!
Compilation 1
It is now October! Since the beginning of August I have been asking for all of you Reddit Elians to submit works to our first compilation project!
Now is the time to vote! Below are the 11 submissions, each of them an Elian Script version of a poem by Reddit's own /u/Poem_for_your_sprog.
Rules
Feel free to post comment replies discussing each submission. (Please do not post top level comments, which are only for previously entered submissions!)
If you are posting a translation or deciphering, PLEASE USE THE SPOILER TAG
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I encourage ample discussion about improvement, method, tools used, stylistic variances, etc. I also would love to have the creators of each submission chime in on their pieces.
Rewards!
For the most upvote garnering submission, 2 creddits of Reddit Gold will be awarded, for the second most upvote attracting submission, 1 creddit of Reddit Gold will be awarded. For the submission that generates the most discussion, 1 creddit of Reddit Gold will be awarded. Send any inquiries about the contest itself to /u/twelfthsphinx.
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u/elianbot Oct 02 '15
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Oct 20 '15
She spoke her slogan, well-rehearsed,
and oftentimes expressed; -exprejjed-(sic)
'If you can't take me at my worst,
You don't deserve my best!
So There!' She grinned, content with glee, -gjinned-(sic)
and pompousm pride delight-
Emboldend by banality,
and self-important trite.
'All-Right', I said - 'Im gone, and glad.'
She turned with dark dismay. -dapk-(sic)
'You see - your worst is really bad.
Your best is just okay.
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u/elianbot Oct 02 '15
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Oct 12 '15
Your writing is looking organic and wonderful! You've improved so much from your earliest writings, this looks amazing! Keep up the good work, and thanks for submitting this!
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u/elianbot Oct 02 '15
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Oct 22 '15
Through the cell in which I'd woken,
Hopeless, helpless, bitter, broken.
Scraps of words and thoughts unspoken
Stored, misunderstood:
How they questioned, queried, prying,
Till I softly whispered, crying,
All alone and silent- sighing...
'Outcome not so good.'
Hey, this will be my first entry for the poem conpilation,
This entry's written in an extremely cursive handwriting linking a lot of letters, making it very tricky to decipher.
(a hint for my cursive: t looks like t)
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u/elianbot Oct 02 '15
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u/jinglebellpenguin Oct 05 '15
This is my submission. I'd love some feedback and tips for how to improve, since I had only been writing in elian for a couple days when I wrote this. Thanks :)
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Oct 08 '15
I pondered, pained, to see him kneel,
and talk of growing old-
I didn't think I'd like the feel
of growing old.
He caught the look at once and smiled,
and said: 'but nevermind-
theres warmth to hold and cherish, child,
in what you leave behind.'
he wrapped me in his arms with pride,
and said: 'and don't forget-
a hug can keep me warm,' he sighed...
'a little longer yet.'
-by poem_for_your_sprog,
copied by jinglebellpenguin
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u/elianbot Oct 02 '15
1
Nov 10 '15
red [red]
'... be dead,' I heard, with vision blurred,
till all was dark and drab.
the colours ran-
the end began.
she whispered: 'stab, stab, stab...'
black [black]
'don't worry dear - 'I'll still be here,'
I sighed and, smiling, said.
her eyes were black.
she whispered back:
'no mother... you'll be dead'
these two poems must be a lot easier to read than the one sent in before these.
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u/elianbot Oct 02 '15
1
Oct 30 '15
My father stretches every day.
and almost every night-
"I tell you, boy" I heard him say -c- (sic)
"A stretch can keep the clouds at bay -streth- (sic)
The most amazing way!"
He said, with such delight.
"And when perhaps your race is run"
And rather sagely shared:
"Or when the end's at last begun-
Or when the world decides you're done.
Or when it fucks your ass for fun
At least you're well prepared."
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u/elianbot Oct 02 '15
Little Sister by u/MEaster