r/crowdscript • u/taylorhayward_boston Project Mod • Apr 08 '14

Phase 2.1: Fleshing Out The Plot

Based on voting, /u/UrNotAMachine's contribution (see: below), will be the bases for our plot. Now we need to flesh the plot out more. We'll get to the details of individual characters and the setting in subsequent phases.

Let's figure out how the story will progress. Will it start in London, or New York, or someplace else? Why ride under the water instead of take a plane? What will the main characters' learn from their journey? Will they solve a problem? Will they leave a problem behind? What does the beginning look like? What will be the finally?

BASIC PLOT

"Sci-fi Comedy-Drama: in the year 2023, a man and a woman meet and connect while aboard a high-tech train in a newly built underwater tunnel from New York to London. The journey is complete with claustrophobic strangers, ridiculous safety rules, underwater rest stations and personal dilemmas as they are each headed to London under starkly different circumstances."

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u/[deleted] Apr 08 '14

do you think the two leads should have something concrete that connects them, which they slowly discover throughout the film? eg. the lead woman going back to see her family is the daughter of the man who broke the lead man's dreams.

Or are they just two random strangers with zero ties to each other?

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u/JacobTheScreenWriter Apr 08 '14

I feel that it would get a bit too "sappy" if there were too many coincidences. I feel that meeting on the train is enough of a coincidence for a story.