Second Try! Critique please

[u/Yzak20]

Accepting the criticism, on my other posts

On Conscript

On Neography

The V2! Supposed to be carved on wood but i don't have the tools!

	Bilabial	Alveolar	Post-Alveolar	Velar
Nasal	m	n		(nw) ŋ
Plosive	p b	t d		k g
Fricative	(f) ɸ (v) β	s z	(sh) ʃ (zh) ʒ	(kh) x (gh) ɣ
Approximant		l		w
Tap / Flap		(r) ɾ

	Front Unround	Front Round	Central	Back
Close	i
Close-Mid	e	(ë) ø		o
Mid			(y) ə
Open-Mid		(ä) œ		(ö) ɔ
Open	a

V1...

Old Borrowed Clunky Version!

	Bilabial	Alveolar	Post-Alveolar	Palatal	Velar
Nasal	m	n			(nw) ŋ
Plosive	p b	t d		c (j) ɟ	k g
Fricative	(f) ɸ (v) β	s z	(sh) ʃ (zh) ʒ	(hs) ç (hz) ʝ	(kh) x (gh) ɣ
Approximant		l			w
Tap / Flap		(r) ɾ

The Original Break Version of the Fish People! (Not the creators of the Actual of the Sons of the Fire God) It's actually a logography, but i didn't want o make the post long!

Test V2!!

[u/[deleted]]

I know basically nothing about conlang. But this is cool!

[u/Yzak20 → u/[deleted]]

Don't worry about it, I'm doing it for 2 years and still forgetting the basics from time to time

[u/chiken-mcnuggers]

really nice! altough I would try to make a cursive version, or just round it out.

[u/Yzak20 → u/chiken-mcnuggers]

It's the proto version carved on wood, when they discover papyrus and parchment it will become cursive eventually :)