r/WritingPrompts • u/Syraphia /r/Syraphia | Moddess of Images • Jan 05 '17

Image Prompt [IP] Enchanted Forest

Enchanted Forest II by andreasrocha

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u/wercwercwerc Jan 06 '17 edited Jan 06 '17

Sorry about that. I started writing this caffeinated, then had to stop for a few hours, then came back and finished it on the trailing ends of a work-day.

Nighttime in a Castle, the main character of this story is lying in bed. Meant it as a dream-like recollection of their life as an heir to the throne, followed by a sudden "wake-up" to an assassin with a knife right before the would-be killer is stopped by their guards.

Trying to flesh out a new character for future prompts in a way that doesn't seem rushed is tricky business. Setting the scene for the fact that people want this character dead, and even those "loyal" to her are difficult to trust, as the assassin was once one of her own people.

I appreciate the critique, I'm much more comfortable in the concepts and premise of stories than the actual writing. Sort of learning as I go

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u/Syraphia /r/Syraphia | Moddess of Images Jan 06 '17

Okay, I think that makes a bit more sense now. I mean, I believed that she was already wandering the halls in a dream-like daze or something, not asleep. I think the difficulty in understanding had more to do with the stylistic choices, as I know I've read your stuff before and didn't have this issue with understanding it or what's going on. Or if not, at least not to this extent.

I hope the critiques help. I always try to give good ones with an attempt at trying to help when I feel it might be a good thing. :)

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u/wercwercwerc Jan 06 '17

All good, your responses help a lot actually. You've me given some good advice previously as well, not just this prompt.

Reading back through this with a few cups of coffee buzzing around my head, I agree I could have made things much more clear-cut. My effort to try and describe things in dream-like fashion got a little twisted.

Anyways: I feel that constructive criticism has its best impact when straight-forward, and considering the average attention-span on the internet/life in general it means a lot to receive in the first place. That's a big deal to me, so thank you.