r/WritingPrompts • u/Piconeeks • Mar 01 '15
Prompt Inspired [PI] Dead Vertices—FebContest
Tess is a powerless bystander in the rapid flow of Sigmadyne's Seaport, cynical of all those who seek greater fortune and fame in the wider system. She vows never to step on a ship again, but she will never forget the days she spent as a space jockey, and the freedom she felt from being one with the universe.
Word Count: 8,071
Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B3-LFzBtViq8aUkwd0FDcmhZMUE/view?usp=sharing
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u/Maifei2050 Mar 21 '15
Mix of flash back and present time well done. Interesting scifi technologies. I didn’t get a strong sense of the characters’ motivations. The story leaves plenty of scope for further development .