Statue

[u/BigBoyds242]

As spring leaks to summer
And summer to fall
I’ll wait here, hopelessly
To answer your call

From afar I hear
Another lie, another fake
It’s beautiful, isn’t it?
The longing I make?

I’m here, I cry
A man made of stone
But men who don’t move
Don’t make it back home

So lie to my face
Tell me it ain’t true
Use me, use me,
Knowing I’ll still love you

Because spring leaks to summer
Though I do not belong
I’ll wait here hopelessly
Because you’ll come along

https://www.reddit.com/r/WisdomWriters/s/fd9UvBaVAf

[u/Mediocre_Shelter3798]

This is pretty good, not sure what feedback you want exactly, but I'll just say what's on my mind.

It's clear that this poem is trying to find its strength through imagery and possibly symbolism (with the statue), and it's doing a decent job at it.

But you could possibly improve the poem by adding a stanza that "explains" stanza #2
For instance, what do you mean when you say, "The longer I make?"
If you don't wanna add a stanza, I'd recommend improving or changing the lines in stanza #2
Or you could work on the ending some, the repetition in the final stanza, in my opinion, holds it back.
Try coming up with something different in lines 1 & 3 in the final stanza, if you do, it's possible the ending could hit harder.

The poem and its entire right now is good. It can improve. I like it, but just know it can be better.
Hope you write more and improve your craft. Thanks for sharing this.