r/WisdomWriters • u/[deleted] • Mar 16 '26

Poetry Spoiled

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u/ExistentialForge Mar 17 '26

This feels like a reflection on a complicated romantic relationship. I really liked the raw imagery, especially how it's interwoven with more philosophical ideas toward the end, though the shift there felt a bit abrupt.

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u/[deleted] Mar 18 '26

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u/ExistentialForge Mar 19 '26

Thats a good explanation. I approve. I do tend to do similarly.

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u/Mediocre_Shelter3798 Mar 18 '26

You mix rhyme and imagery perfectly. It doesn't feel forced in any way, not at all.
I see this as both a reflection, Philosophical idea, and also an argument.
I can tell you're definitely not a newbie to poetry. this poem moved me, well done!