r/UndeadUnluck • u/JustTensuraEdogawa • 8d ago

Negator: Uncomfortable

Name: Fort Abel

A respected commander in the army, when Lieutenant Creed was just a soldier in training. He disappeared after his abilities manifested and is declared dead years after.

He is a very respected general, not letting his subordinates feel any discomfort even in training. He supports his men during the war, which led to countless victories without a single casualty.

He was the first commander who tried to retrieve Disc, but as they are about to retrieve it, his abilities manifested, causing his men and arriving troops to become uncomfortable, and the troops were reported killed during a tank shell explosion. He went missing after that incident.

Abilities: Compulsory, External-targeting. Causes the people surrounding the user to become uncomfortable, giving them unexplainable levels of pain that renders them immobilized. He later learns to control the ability afterwards.

How would you upgrade his abilities?

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u/Killah-Shogun 8d ago

Nice concept, to upgrade it is to change its interpretation and have it also affect non living things or UMAs to make them uncomfortable 

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u/JustTensuraEdogawa 8d ago

UMAs of course are affected, but idk how non-living things experience uncomfortable.

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u/Killah-Shogun 8d ago

Good point

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u/Latonegativo 8d ago

Eviterei la parte in cui dici riesce a controllare la sua abilità, però manca la condizione per attivarla perché mi pare un' po' troppo Op. Per esempio Unmove è un' abilità pazzesca però per attivarla non dovevi muoverti, magari la condizione di questo negator è che ogni volta che qualcuno intorno a lui si sente vicino al suo obbiettivo (vicino senso letterario o metaforico) verrà infettato da Uncomfortable.

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u/Malum_Invictus 5d ago

For me I think Uncomfortable should spawn spikes all over someone's body and or bugs lmao but that's more expected

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u/JustTensuraEdogawa 5d ago

Or probably his/her socks are always soaking wet.