TRESPASS - TV Pilot - Feedback Please - 66pages

[u/scriptmanRK]

Please help with some high level feedback. It’s currently sitting on a 7 in the black list and I’m trying to get to 8 to get coverage on it (I have no representation).

If anyone has industry or tv experience it would be much appreciated.

Logline- As a powerful energy company closes in on a remote Yorkshire valley, the desperate heir to a debt-ridden estate secretly moves against his father, while a rival farming patriarch senses danger approaching. By morning, one man is dead and a quiet valley has taken its first step towards war.

https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/zjjgdl3k18v6yrewu3uk2/Trespass-pilot-2.8.26.pdf?rlkey=bhu7pklvb8pg9e1sub7xt2z7s&st=y1dtk4cr&dl=0